I tried so hard every day
to make my heart whole,
little did I know that beneath
all my faults and falsified loves
I can still breathe with a deformed version.
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peace to all ~flight
A contest entry
- Pic Inspired by HeavenScent4U.
600 points, ended October 18, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
honesty
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i find a broken heart can never be completely put back together...sorry my glass is half-empty these days. I do agree witht the last line...i can still breathe. Breathing just isn't as pleasant. great write!
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Exactly. Though I don't think I've ever had
the pleasure of a broken heart, I'm still
young to the world of love
peace to all ~flight
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opps forgot these, sorry
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this is interesting, well i'm intrigued by the last line i think you may have a type in last line though breath should (maybe) be breathe? thanks for entering and good luck. be well and be blessed
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Yeah, thanks for catching the spelling mistake!
Thanks for the comment.
peace to all ~flight
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Hey girl,
Gorgeous picture you painted in my head. Just so you know you accidently put breath instead of breathe in the last line! Love you girl and good luck in the contest!
Angi
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Thanks Angi doll!
peace to all ~flight
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