all i ever
really needed
was a woolen blanket
and your bare leg
(prickly with chill)
against mine
through the iciest of
winter evenings
Author notes
24 words
A contest entry
- Make me want MORE by Suzanne Dia.
1000 points, ended October 30, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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lol... i agree with dusty
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Well done as always.
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mel's comment makes me laugh. i can't comment now, hahaha. sweet. dusty
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Hi Lee ... i like this too .. a couple of things though ... i dont think you need cold or iciest ... we get the feeling with bare/chill/winter ... (i played a little with some other stuff ... )
all i ever
really needed
was a woolen blanket
and your bare leg
(prickly with chill)
against mine
through winter evenings
i love the bare leg/prickly with chill ... lovely !
enjoyed this >>> Gina
PS ... i would IF it were mine ... make the 'all i ever' the title of the piece and then flow into 'really needed' ... -
aww...wonderful moment..and reflection
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Awesome and inspiringlol
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I like the punch that this delivers.
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aren't you the sap.
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This is another sigh in the contest. It's beautiful and full of memory for me.
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