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Ache

 




 

A spot in the bedroom
creaks and moves, each time my foot
touches


You ask on the phone -
What sound I make,
from the floorboards up?



 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Nicolette gold member
    October 26, 2007

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    Now you have me wondering about that sound you make... this is excellent - one for the imagination...!!



    ~ Nicolette


  • J.J. Sass
    October 25, 2007
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    Ah. Excellent!

    Best wishes in the contest.


  • FindingFaith
    October 24, 2007
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  • ArtFullyMe silver member
    October 19, 2007

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    Interesting question.. ( not that I can take it in the context of the write ... lol you know me ) but the question itself ..I find intriguing because I can't resolve what sound an entire body makes into one thing..

    thanks for that


  • michael thomas gold member
    October 17, 2007

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    This is heart-up sentiment. The cave-worn walls of familiarity, where things around us become used to us, this is called love. Upon floors of carnal knowledge of our feet do we walk. Inside quiet corners of echoes do we love.


    • NurseChilly gold member
      October 17, 2007
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      carnal knowledge of our feet do we walk ... me thinks, i'll steal that line

      thank you kind sir

      G.x


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    October 16, 2007

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    and do those sounds
    hesitate
    between the sheets?
    LOL
    i had to hee he

    this was awsome girly girl!!!


    • EvilKate
      October 17, 2007
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      No - you really didn't - but my laughter muscles are glad you did

    • NurseChilly gold member
      October 17, 2007
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      hahahha you bad girl.... lmao

      hhehehehehehhe


  • Cat
    October 16, 2007
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    - wonderful poetry


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    October 16, 2007
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    I want more!





  • Danna Hobart
    October 16, 2007
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    Great question. Nobody has ever asked me that.

  • Melissa Gayle gold member
    October 16, 2007
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    Hot damn, I love it.

  • Rowan gold member
    October 16, 2007
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    so??? lol.


  • Night Hope gold member
    October 16, 2007

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    Sweet & soulful, much like the one who penned this beauty. Good luck in the contest, my Friend. Wanda


  • misselaineous
    October 16, 2007

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    reminded me when i used to avoid the creaking floorboards...

    this is delicious
    i like the floorboard series muchly miss gilly
    elaine


  • EvilKate
    October 16, 2007

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    Aiyeee! From the floorboards up! - just glorious!

    As though I wasn't feeling mushy enough already - sheesh! You woman .. you are an enabler!! Bad Gilly!

  • Suzanne Dia
    October 16, 2007

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    Uh huh.

    Same sound that is found between footsteps crossing the attic at night.

    Lovely, Gillian.

    • NurseChilly gold member
      October 16, 2007
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      damn you're clever, Gillian huh?? oohh my Miss Suzanne

      i love you lady

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