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The tides swim night and day.

The sun hums the hoary requiem
of the night sky, a chromatic dirge
as the ebon veil lifts, there comes
a shift, swift recognition, surcease
cognition of the smitten dance done daily,
as ethereal ecstasy exhaulted each morning,
etched upon ancient walls of time, the
cascading onyx cloak sublimes certainly into
the divine, we the product of this celestial
reaction swim in exquisite sunlight, but for
such a short time, as nothing gold can stay,
so should the sun, pale and defeated parry
nightshade throws escaping into the lithe
gossamer of imagination; only to return triumphant
when scales of victory be tipped and trite.
The champion returns to reclaim the tide,
until that time its forever night.

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  • cake
    October 21, 2007

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    I like this piece very much. I like the subject matter and indeed it's role it's most significant important and place in our lives.

  • semicharmed
    October 21, 2007
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    Haha, this is so cool. I love this, it kind of reminds me of that speech that V does in V for Vendetta, except not in all V's. I don't really know all the allusions that the others picked up on, but I think superficially, which is basically all I can interpret, I loved it for all the little alliterations. Cool take on the topic too.


  • Shadow of a Crow
    October 17, 2007

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    Now this.. I can understand. I enjoyed the internal rhymescheme and alliteration you had throughout the piece. I also love the allusion to Robert Frost. The end sentence was definitely a strong note to a superbly written piece. I also enjoyed the use of the word "surcease"--of course Poe comes to mind with that word if you know "The Raven" as well as I do, and it doesn't seem to be a commonly used word but it worked well in the context...this is one I could pick at for a few hrs for your use of diction, but I won't. It's a good piece, enough said.


  • Sanity-Day10
    October 16, 2007

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    Hm the refrence to The Outsiders fits perfectly =] (I'm glad I read that, cuz now I feel informed ) hm but another night/day thing right? I just get so many images it's weird to see things in such a different light. Another wonderful-fantastic-astounding-alltheadjectivesthataregood piece =]]


    • Deindichter
      October 17, 2007
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      Thank you for the comment, but I am slightly confused.. Where was the reference to the outsiders? Its been so long since I read that, did I do it inadvertantly?

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