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Knit Purl Quivers

May I never not know
the knit, purl, slip,
the not so innocent quiver
of this slithery, sensual awakening.

The knit, purl thrust
of another knot
bursting into light,
consuming the mind.

The knit, purl moistness
that gathers, flows, streams forth
from the artist,
soaking my wanton sex.

Playing with my skin until I scream heat,
bound inside your hands,
captured in the knit, purl of your heart.

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  • pain is strength
    November 28, 2007

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    i really love this one.. it is very romantic.. with a hint of lust in it.. i really enjoy your writing.. please continue with this wonderful writing!!!!!

    -Love


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 4, 2007
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    I am not a fan of free verse as a whole. Much of it seems to me to be prose with random and pointless line breaks. This is not a non-poem of that sort, brilliant use of repetition, lovely pacing understated but seething sensuality and a perfect take on the prompt.
    Thank-you for an excellent read.


  • Apsinthion
    October 18, 2007

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    that was pretty interesting!

    "Playing with my skin until I scream heat,
    bound inside your hands,
    captured in the knit, purl of your heart."

    sexual, sensual and with a twist heh..
    very nice piece!

    ~rana~


  • algoressister
    October 17, 2007
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    very nice....

    I love your metaphors....very sexy write....ttfn


  • leo2
    October 17, 2007

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    I never thought of knitting in this vein but the thread of thought makes perfect sense when put in that perspective. Best of luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long


  • Tattboyspet
    October 17, 2007

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    thank you for your entry
    lol - I have NEVER been able to concentrate on this knitting thing for long


  • pointlessdayz
    October 16, 2007

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    How interesting! This gives a whole new twist to my knitting that I've never thought of before. Excellent write!

    -Alex

  • Opheli
    October 16, 2007

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    sensual

    I'm a knitter so I appreciate how the rhythm of stitching coincides with the rhythm of sex. The picture is a lot like what's usually on my mind when I zone out while knitting. Your poem captures that perfectly. Kudos, I really like it.


  • Peteskid gold member
    October 16, 2007

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    the words here, so alluring and sensual, knit purl has a sultry rhythm, soft sounds and purring words.. so very well done here, quite the mood... PK

  • Judith Chandler
    October 16, 2007
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    knitting

    that's a sexual image I would not have thought of. It' kind of fun (as sex should be)

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