Which words, and in what sequence
Would bring you to your knees?
What instrument, what notes and harmonies
Would cripple you?
What colors would send you into a frenzy?
Author notes
Twenty-eight words.
A contest entry
- Make me want MORE by Suzanne Dia.
1000 points, ended October 30, 2007, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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This is absolutely awesome.
Really well written and composed.
Good work.
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I believe this did exactly what the contest asked for... It made me want MORE!!! Absolutely wonderful!!!
Anna
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Words in Sequence!
Any color makes me frenzy (in a good way). Crimson red, cerulean blue, sunny-yellow, bright green, hot-electric pink, concord purple, highlighted neon, any color of the world; I love colors! As for instruments, I don't know. I like this!
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I think you've addressed the title-topic well, and this is one of the few times I've seen a poem do that when composed exclusively of questions.
(Given that, I wonder if it really will "make one want more", as it seems complete.)
My day, however, wouldn't be complete if I didn't provide the following, to circmumvent your contrariness. (Hell, you can always delete it if you want.)
The motif of harmful sensation refers to the physical or mental damage that a person suffers merely by experiencing what should normally be a benign sensation. The phenomenon appears in both traditional and modern stories.
The theme is similar to the notion of the evil eye: the sight that harms is the gaze that harms. The harm is thought to be caused by seeing something or being seen by it — a parallel idea is the contrast between metaphysical or vitalist conceptions that treat vision as an active function of the eye, and the scientific conception of the eye as passively receiving light that is present even when vision does not occur.
While this motif is largely imaginary, a real-life example is epileptic seizures triggered by strobe lights. Light flashing at a specific frequency can "pump" EEG rhythms at the same frequency and induce a seizure. This effect can also be triggered by flashing screens in film and video games. The Pokémon episode Dennō Senshi Porygon was believed to have caused seizures in some 700 children (although the number actually affected was later thought to be far fewer).
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I was guilty of something I hate having done to me.
I read without reading.
Anyhow, I get this I think, oh, and I'd say you did what I asked if I came back with my 2nd thoughts on it. Means I was still thinking on it when i left. -
Well, ok, on second viewing (and with the lovely new color scheme), I do realize this just proves to me what a button pusher you are
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I was debating whether or not to explain what the motif of harmful sensation actually is in my notes. I figured if anyone cared enough they could research it themselves.
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