And that's just it, isn't it? You never understood why I felt the way I did. You never got it, not ever. That I just prefer when things go wrong, and when people disappoint me. It's wrong to expect too much, when you'll only be let down. A black sky and twenty-two kisses later, you swore you still loved me. I stared down at your feet and whispered that [hell is just a sauna].
I only wanted you between my fingers, golden rods shooting out from my gums and your jaw cracking against my neck. Apologies are too long, when the only words we can ever say are four lettered. That's the way it plays up, me on the ground and you standing above, screaming I'm sorries at the top of your lungs. Well maybe I only hear what I want to hear, and maybe my feet should stop moving everytime you walk by; but I just don't know how to say goodbye anymore.
There are holes in my ceilings and december mornings find me staring through them at the unraveling sky, shivering beneath sheets and blankets that only cover my thighs. (You used to cover the rest, remember?) I planted beads into your ears, pulling strings and making you p.e.r.f.e.c.t. with shoelaces and doll hair. We spoke, but we never listened. shut up in closets, in locked backrooms there were only feet and mistakes marking the walls. Silence was too loud, and I could only scream at that empty sky, wanting you to scream back long after you had gone.
And if I said I'm sorry for loving you like this; I'd be lying.If I said I'm sorry for not being able to let go; I'd be lying. The only thing I'm sorry for, is not being able to hold on. To hold on, to the one thing that made me feel, something. Anything.
You are [were] my every emotion. My heart break, my heart beat, my heart attack. You have [had] all of me in your chest; beating away beneath your ribcage and pounding me into your spinal chord. And I, I lost all my feelings when I let go of you;
how cliche' is that?
Author notes
tell me. be brutally honest.
In a list
A contest entry
- II. i'm only human ♥ by love tank x.
1150 points, ended November 18, 2007, 21 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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No one is worth giving yourself to like this. I read your poetry and you are amazing at expressing yourself. Sometimes, I can only imagine what it feels like to be there, because I have been there.But it doesn't last forever. I hope between then and now, a lot has changed.
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baby this is amazing
You are [were] my every emotion. My heart break, my heart beat, my heart attack. You have [had] all of me in your chest; beating away beneath your ribcage and pounding me into your spinal chord. And I, I lost all my feelings when I let go of you;
my favourite bit.
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Silence was too loud, and I could only scream at that empty sky, wanting you to scream back long after you had gone.
The only thing I'm sorry for, is not being able to hold on. To hold on, to the one thing that made me feel, something. Anything.
...amzingly written... can bring back hacking suffocating memories.. [ to the one thing that made me feel, something. Anything.
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This was beautiful, anymore words, and I'll have ruined this comment. <3
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briliant
"I only wanted you between my fingers, golden rods shooting out from my gums and your jaw cracking against my neck. Apologies are too long, when the only words we can ever say are four lettered. That's the way it plays up, me on the ground and you standing above, screaming I'm sorries at the top of your lungs.'
the words you use and the emotion I felt in this poem really grabbed me,it had a really interesting flair
of originality,as I feel alot of poems like this style
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i love this!!
i love how the words just flow. very talented. im jealous. lol. -
I love this sweetie. It's wonderful. I love the way that you write and all of the details and descriptions that you include. I can relate to this. Amazing write.
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Wow this was so amazing, the title is waht got me the morest. but the content is so heartbreaking. this is just beyond amazing.
<33
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wow.
this is amazing.
it's so painful. I think what hurts most is what you said about letting go
"The only thing I'm sorry for, is not being able to hold on. To hold on, to the one thing that made me feel, something. Anything."
beautiful.
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ZOMG.
i can't believe i missed this.. oOoO this makes me pissy! but anywho.. darling.. this was beyond the moon & stars wonderful.
everrrry emotion you envoke is so strong my eyes get watery and i cant' hold it in. like on the real you fucking know my pain & i feel close to you because of it. either way i am so mad i didn't comment this sooner but forgive me love? ily much keep this good shit coming <3
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"I only wanted you between my fingers, golden rods shooting out from my gums and your jaw cracking against my neck. Apologies are too long, when the only words we can ever say are four lettered."
wow I loved that apologies line....
"Silence was too loud, and I could only scream at that empty sky, wanting you to scream back long after you had gone."
ow.
I couldn't stand how true this was! I honestly felt a kick in my stomach because it hurts to relate, and see it spelled out so emotionally-packed.
I'm not exaggerating the least when I say I adored this.
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um.
This was amazing. Brought me to tears. I loved everything about it.
"Silence was too loud, and I could only scream at that empty sky, wanting you to scream back long after you had gone.
And if I said I'm sorry for loving you like this; I'd be lying.If I said I'm sorry for not being able to let go; I'd be lying. The only thing I'm sorry for, is not being able to hold on. To hold on, to the one thing that made me feel, something. Anything.
You are [were] my every emotion. My heart break, my heart beat, my heart attack. You have [had] all of me in your chest; beating away beneath your ribcage and pounding me into your spinal chord. And I, I lost all my feelings when I let go of you;
how cliche' is that? "
FREAKING GORGEOUS!!!
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awww;
i'm glad you liked it.
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And that's just it, isn't it? You never understood why I felt the way I did. You never got it, not ever
A black sky and twenty-two kisses later, you swore you still loved me. I stared down at your feet and whispered that [hell is just a sauna].
Apologies are too long, when the only words we can ever say are four lettered.
Well maybe I only hear what I want to hear, and maybe my feet should stop moving every time you walk by; but I just don't know how to say goodbye anymore.
(You used to cover the rest, remember?)
And if I said I'm sorry for loving you like this; I'd be lying.If I said I'm sorry for not being able to let go; I'd be lying. The only thing I'm sorry for, is not being able to hold on. To hold on, to the one thing that made me feel, something. Anything.
You are [were] my every emotion. My heart break, my heart beat, my heart attack. You have [had] all of me in your chest; beating away beneath your ribcage and pounding me into your spinal chord. And I, I lost all my feelings when I let go of you;
how cliche' is that?
Best poem ever<33 really.
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Baby!
this is freaking amazing!
dont down it. your a brilliant writer!
xx
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i freaking love it.
"touching"..
and i can relate.
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Sweetie--this is far more than enough!
This is brilliant, honestly...yes the ending is a little abrupt but I think it works well. Also the title is amazing.
"I only wanted you between my fingers, golden rods shooting out from my gums and your jaw cracking against my neck. Apologies are too long, when the only words we can ever say are four lettered. That's the way it plays up, me on the ground and you standing above, screaming I'm sorries at the top of your lungs."
Wow. This is exactly what I was looking for babe; thanks so much for entering<333
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