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The First Time (18+)

Young, virgin, me.
You came into my life,
At first we were just “friends”.
But one day that all changed.
I had waited so long,
You taught me many things.
I touch you gently at first,
I take your hand and place it on me.
You grab and rub.
Kisses begin,
Starting at my head
Slowly moving down to my feet.
Back up,
Were you play with my piercings
With your tongue.
Fingers tease for what seems like forever.
Finally, foreplay stops!
You are inside!
We make love gently at first.
Slowly moving together as one.
As it becomes more intense,
We move faster and faster.
You flip me over and continue!
You grab my hair and pull!
As you plunge in so deep,
The feeling is amazing!
Faster, faster!!
It happens.
You hold the last a little longer.
You turn me back over,
Lay down, breathing hard.
You place your hand
Gently on my breast.
Kiss my neck,
And
Whisper in my ear
That you love me.

Author notes

After this was the first time my baby said those three words to me...I never thought we would be anything but friends but now we are engaged!

Leslie

Other poems: My Heart and I Am Nothing Without You.


Tarja: Option #7

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  • artis
    April 17, 2008
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    To give of oneself, allowing him to embed

    his desires into the center of your need, after simple words and kisses no longer suffice. To satisfy the feelings generated in his presence, to know the bliss of a deep flesh kiss, above.... below, till all lets go, and to find sheer ecstacy in the finish of such a sweet act is truly a worthy first love taken to the umpteenth degree. Lovely write. Please check your spelling on the word where/were, and thanks for your entry~~Artis

  • Sam-a-nantha
    November 17, 2007
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    wow, that was pretty descriptive. I'm impressed.


  • Tarja
    November 11, 2007
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    Congrats on the two silver and the bronze trophies also congrats on the engagement. I think though that this needs more passion and format to really live up to everything it good be. It would benefit by being more dramatic and deep. Just a thought... Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Miss Kristy
    November 5, 2007
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    Sweet!

    Very nice.
    I dont know if you ment to do this, and im not being mean, but at the tart it sounded clumsy almost. I really like it, because it is akward at the start, the emotion in this write is beautiful

    you are a great writer!!
    You are in the finals!
    x x x


  • XInsanity-FairX
    October 28, 2007

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    this is amazing!!!!
    it has such emotional impact
    and the imagery is great

    i think it's great how you find true love when you weren't looking for it, and didn't expect it. it's like a fairytale.
    it's the best and most powerful kind of love
    and i am very happy that you found it and in such a sweet romance movie kinda way.

    it's similar to me and my bf's 'story'...
    i never wanted to fall in love with him, tbh i just wanted some action(yeah i'm a slut get over it)
    and i lost my virginity to him, and afterwards i just kinda knew we were meant to be together.and we fell in love...and it's magical

    so i can kinda relate to you

    beautiful piece, thanks for entering and good luck

    xxxx


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    October 24, 2007
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    thank you so very much for this fine entry into my contest for david. it is truly appreciated more than you can possibly know. am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future and i wish you the best of luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie


  • Lick On Her1275
    October 22, 2007
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    nice job here i think you got in tiuch with your emotions with this one good luck in the contest


  • risewiththesmoke
    October 22, 2007

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    GREAT write. it sounds like overall you have good memories of your first time, yet at the end of the poem it still seems like, i dont know, a little bit haunting. thanks for entering!!


  • xxlisajazminexx
    October 18, 2007

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    whewwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww

    sounds good to me.... lol!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    my first time was something like that too... sounds like you had fun.......
    written with a strait to the point angle and i loved it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    great job!!!!




    Thank you so much for entering this creative work of art into my Contest!!!!!!!

    much love and respects!!!
    XxLisaJazminexX
    _____________________________________________________________________

  • Page Deleted
    October 16, 2007
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    wow...very straight forward...but definitely good haha! sorry i couldnt add more im sooo busy

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