this coin
of bone & wire
spends us slowly,
an intimate
purchase
that words
[ dropped like dollars ]
could never afford;
continues conversations
when lips fall mute
but for a metallic
sheen.
In a list
A contest entry
- Photo Prompt by Grunts Girl.
1800 points, ended October 22, 2007, 12 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think (Critical Honesty Appreciated)
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hmm. luuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurrrrrrrrrrrrrrbbbbbbbbbbbbbb.
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wonderful... wonderful...
the imagery and message, quite concise... I love the play on the idea... poignant and creative... poignantly creative?
congratulations! a well deserved gold!
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Oohhhh...
I like this...very well done!
Your use of language is very impressive...the brevity lends to this "feeling" and atmosphere.
The ending is great.
Very good write with the prompt!
THE TITLE IS SUPERB!
Blessings!
Tammy
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thank you for this...
the ending was fabulous
and i really liked
'spends us slowly'
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That's some muse you have, eh?
This is really nice. I don't have crits. I enjoy the fact that there is abstract flavor to this and that it explains how words spoken or not nearly as heavy as the words held back. At least that's what I got.
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spends us slowly.... oh, how i want to spent like that.. damn!!
no change in my pocket on this one Kate, you can rummage for nickels and quarters... but all i got is pounds, shillings and pence, but im spent up
yes i am
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