dissolved into mist,
vapour, haze
staring back in the mirror
no longer my face
i held my life,
then let it pass
in my endeavour to attain
the perfect hourglass
Author notes
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A contest entry
- this contest might get me in trouble by vacant lot.
307 points, ended October 18, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Size Zero verses Obesity by flyingphoenix.
750 points, ended December 2, 2007, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Nice work
It's abstract, yet I uderstand it.
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I liked this. I enjoy poems that are so short but say a lot. I liked the second half of the poem - it summed up your message perfectly for me.
A brave write, I enjoyed it.
Thank you for entering, good luck
Sunny
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Excellent! The last lines are brilliant! I thought I'd commented on this before... hmmm...
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Great Piece
You've summed up the after facts very well in this. ED's destroy lives more than most people ever realize. I hope this was a contest inspired write and not one from a friend who will really need your and quite a few others help to see the truth behind their problems. Good luck in the contest, Dear Heart. Love Mom
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this is so great.. very good. its short but says all that needs to be said
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Do I have to leave a new comment? Well I can't remember what I said. Something about a fat kid. Oh... that was me. nvm haha glad you got it in.
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