It’s my bid to escape,
To turn back the cogs of time
I see your face etched there
Streaming with drops of love.
The words become a blur,
I cannot think or breathe.
Only feel your shadow pass through me,
My window into your distant memories.
I’m running away from reality,
It’s the only way I know how,
It’s all I’ve ever done,
It’s everything I’ve ever lost.
But I'm broken out of this dream
And forced back into this harsh surrounding.
The grief overcomes me
And I beg for relief once again.
Then a sweet child’s smile
Reminds me why I'm here,
A heartbreaking laugh
As I'm pulling forward by innocent, tiny hands.
Author notes
Ok then... This was written for my English assignment, on the movie Finding Neverland. A poem that is linked to the movie through themes and what not...
Please tell me what you think
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Finding Neverland was an excellent movie. It made me so sad though! This was a great piece, when I read the author's notes it held even more meaning to me.
I think you did an excellent job however my one suggestion is to fix the flow... in most of the stanzas there is on line that is noticeably longer than the rest. Other than that great write.
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This is superb!
Powerful, well constructed and thought provoking, though, I myself, hated that film!
This poece can be attached to life and daily charades/triobulations, as well as the movie. Wonderful writing Raven.
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this is great
i loved it
the whole thing is brilliant
I love this part the best
"I’m running away from reality,
It’s the only way I know how,
It’s all I’ve ever done,
It’s everything I’ve ever lost."
I think you should do well in your assignment =]
=D
congratulations
beks
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awww how nice. I enjoyed reading your piece. lexy xxx
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this is really good sweety
an A for sure
i love you
i miss u -
*Throws pineapples at you!*
"I’m running away from reality,
It’s the only way I know how,
It’s all I’ve ever done,
It’s everything I’ve ever lost.
But im broken out of this dream
And forced back into this harsh surrounding.
The grief overcomes me
And I beg for relief once again."
GET THE FUCK OUT OF MY HEAD GIRLY!!!
Amazing though, the last stanza reminds me of this time last year... I LOVE YOU very well done and best of luck with your assignment.
♥
Bandaid. -
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Woah, I'm sorry. I wasnt thinking of you when i wrote it, was in class so it was really hard to write..
*catches pineapple and eats it* yummy, thank you bandy.
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*Throws pineapples at you!*
"I’m running away from reality,
It’s the only way I know how,
It’s all I’ve ever done,
It’s everything I’ve ever lost.
But im broken out of this dream
And forced back into this harsh surrounding.
The grief overcomes me
And I beg for relief once again."
GET THE FUCK OUT OF MY HEAD GIRLY!!!
Amazing though, the last stanza reminds me of this time last year... I LOVE YOU very well done and best of luck with your assignment.
♥
Bandaid.
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nice words , nicer sentiment , well done .
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Well Penned!
My dear beautiful sweet sis I really loved this poem of yours. Although this is for your English class assignment I really found this poem very well penned. the methaphors used through out are incredible and that ending is just pure beauty. any ways this is a gem stone of a poem and I really love reading this. The way youe wording flows from line to line is something I have rarily read tonight. Excellent depthj and structure will turn this poem into an A+ paper or whatever the highest grade down there is. any ways nice work and keep up the good work.
Signed, Bro
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