Here I go again
Spiralling out of control
Needing a helping hand
Needing a guardian angel to watch over me
But I doubt I'll get those
For who really cares about me?
Certainly not my parents, who sideline me every opportunity they get
Not my 'friends', who pretend to like me.
Why, oh why, do I put on a false face for them, pretend to be somebody I'm not?
Why do I suffer through all the pain, chasing a dream that's never gonna happen
Why don't I just vanish?
Why do I cling onto hope, thinking it'll all be alright?
Why am I such a fucking fool?
I just don't know anymore
Why I suffer being pushed around
Why I even talk to people any more
Why do I try, when all I get is pain?
I need to be loved
Will that ever happen?
And don't fucking say 'I love you' just to cheer me up
Because that hurts me even more
Don't even /think/ about screwing with my mind
It's already been done
I'm a broken spirit
As I lay here crying and writing this
My question is who will help me now?
Author notes
Just musing and feeling like I'm falling out of control...who will help/save me?
A contest entry
- Wicked Games and Lithium Dreams [18+] by Immortal Obscurity.
900 points, ended October 19, 2007, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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ily buddy!!!!!!!!!!!
and i care for you -
aah i feel sad for you hun i dont know what to say
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HEART-WRENCHING!!!!
I feel much the same way, sadly as we go through life we find so much pain and sorrow. Will there ever be a little happiness come our way? I am not sure but somehow we trudge on and keep trying don't we? I guess that is all we can do.
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enjoyed the read..really deep thoughts great write
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the world is a cold place
it has lost its sense of values
and love for one another in so many ways
this is a sad part of life
bless you
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life can leave one with questions... yet how do we answer them.
we can let it go through our depression or we can do something about it.
feel that your freinds are fake...then simply find new ones.
Live is a jouney...but it's up to us on which path we take
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Well done. I'm feeling the emotions here. And you certenly seem to have a lot of them. bravo and beautiful
job.
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Wow there is alot of emotion and meaning in that!!!
Really good...
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You have penned some very deep thoughts here. Problems we all go through in life. Maybe different circumstances but we go through them. And to answer your questions, only God can save you. Allow He to set your mind free. You don't HAVE to be depressed 24/7 even though you claim to be. Just trust Him.
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Hmm you're not a fool
If you are a fool you wouldn't write such a great piece..this poem explodes with your feelings and emotions very good..please calm down, please cheer up..You've got me and other poets here who support you and care about you..anyway LOVELY LOVELY poem!
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i luved it
luv it
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brilliant write, well done,
I will save you/ help u if you want me to
Or at least keep you company in the long spiral downwards.
Great write keep it up,
Zoe xxx
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Like it.
Give 'em a good larrapin, like it.
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great poem here Raven you told your feelings out in the open it relieves people to put feeling in their poems it rids you of your troubles
Love will not come if you seek it it hits unexpectidly and someone will be out there to hold you keep holding onto hope it will come and be a salvation
Certainly not my parents, who sideline me every opportunity they get
Not my 'friends', who pretend to like me.
Why, oh why, do I put on a false face for them, pretend to be somebody I'm not?
Why do I suffer through all the pain, chasing a dream that's never gonna happen
Why don't I just vanish?
Why do I cling onto hope, thinking it'll all be alright?
Why am I such a fucking fool?
I love this sranza it should more emotion
keep it up -
i want to tell you that your poems ,, i enjoyed thankyou for sharing ,you have heart
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beautifully touching
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Freestyle piece full of raw emotion. Powerful stuff. Well done. P.S. I don't love you either...lol
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wow...that's deep
and not bad
ur a good write -
Sometimes we all need to rant and rave
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Sad. You create what you think. The passion is intense, It seems like you were just getting all of pissed off'd ness out. I liked it so much I'd say if you cleaned up the short and long sentances it would scream at you. I love when poetry does that! Good write.
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I felt when reading this that it could be structured better, cut a bit on the repetition in regards to the main "emotion" that is used throughout, and perhaps less straight-forward, and the last line isn't needed.
The overall piece seems more of a "rant", than a poem. Though a rant can have poetic qualities to them, and perhaps even be poetic, I feel this piece falls short of that. It's more of a rant, then anything.
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damn I have felt that way many a time, so could connect with your words
It was well written
I hope you didn't feel that way for too long and if you do ever again, you can call on me friend :0
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Watch out for a follw up poem...
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Awwww. I love creative anger, you get some of your best work out of it. I helps you clear your head, and let your emotions simmer off. Powerful write, it give the reader a lot to think about. However I must agree with Immortal, the cursing lowers your standards a bit. A truely talented writer such as yourself should be able to express their hurt, rage and indeed any other emotions without cursing! But anyways, really good write.
Peace
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Hmmm.... Firstly, I'll compliment you on the poem. It had that nice, simmering-beneath-the-surface anger in it, and sometimes, that can be even more intense that outright cursing and swearing.
The only thing is, I know who you are because... Well, you gave yourself away in the group thread. Indeed, though, well done, and good luck in my contest.
L.
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This is a wonderfully expressive write. The hurt and anguish you feel are woven so well into your words. I loved the write. You know I'm here if you need to talk. I won't say I love you.
But I do care. 
Not a guardian angel either. Just a shadow that watches the world go by and helps if she can. Always know that someone does care (your friends obviously do).
Good luck in the contest.
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aaw this made me feel so blue but don't worry im always here if you need someone to talk to the poem was awesome you did well in expressing your feelings.
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dude but what if i do love yaz pal ^.^ cause I really do ^.
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I'm sorry I can't help.
But I can try to and tell you
that I really like this poem.
I can totally relate.
I really can.
I know how you feel.
And I'm sorry you feel this way.
It sucks.
But, obviously,
good poetry comes of it.
Great job on the poem.
Hope you Guardian Angel
shows up soon.
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