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guitar guerrilla

in the trenches of indifference
she fights a losing battle
music her weapon, her salvation

warpaint on her cheekbones
calluses on her fingertips

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  • polly filla
    March 21, 2008

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    great 1st line

    what does she do (with those fingertips), tho'? I want to experience her fight!


    • Kylia Skydancer
      March 22, 2008
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      hmm...that sounded slightly perverse.

      she plays her instrument of course. This poem was written for a picture-inspired contest...the picture was of a girl holding a guitar and having streaks of paint on her cheeks. (I think. To be honest I don't really remember it all that well anymore.)


  • Li snuffles
    February 29, 2008

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    I really enjoyed reading this. You are very talented!

    I loved how you wrote about the trenches and the warpaint. The description of her "coping mechanism" was truely amazing!


  • HeavenScent4U
    October 17, 2007

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    i like this a lot. "trenches of indifference" what an awesome line and how many of us use music as a getaway or a high or something to keep us going. the last two lines are classic thanks for entering and good luck. be well and be blessed


  • Mirrored.in.faith
    October 16, 2007

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    I like the images you get when you read this.

    Good luck for the contest and well done.

    Keep writing and having good ideas.

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