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Look Down On You

Don't look at me,

all you see is everything

you thought you needed,

you're defeated,
Cause every time

you try to hide your face,

I find another lie in place
When I'm down here,

my fears all disappear,

your panic set in place

and perseveres
And that's all you need it seems,

you scream at me to feed your self esteem
Now I look down on you,

surprised I've grown twice the size,

of your emotional demise

Author notes

Fuck!!!!!! I got a headache, And I can't sleep!!!
But, DAMN this is a kickass song!!!

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  • GypsyEyes
    December 25, 2007

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    this is flippin' amazing! congrats on the gold!!!! great poem and i wish you good luck in my twin's contest. Merry Christmas!
    ~Dommi

  • celadia
    October 23, 2007
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    It sounds like you're talking to a petulant teen-ager, fine effort, in my opinion.,

  • ashjoe76
    October 20, 2007

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    Sounds very honest and straighforward. No wonder you got the gold, you deserve it! I love the unique phrases like 'emotional demise'. You have some true talent! Congratulations!


  • HeavenScent4U
    October 17, 2007

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    Bravo, WOW FACTOR here. I love the intensity in the reclaiming of ones-self. this is kind of right there in your face WABAM! nothing gets a person that puts you down and screams for attention and praise more than standing up for yourself and saying, "that's it, i'm done, not taking it anymore," well at least that's what i get from this thanks for entering this and good luck. be well and be blessed