stay with me
together the cold can't claim us.
the collision of your kiss
could start a fire
can we turn a few hours into something more?
lets make this last.
We could run away
somewhere we wont be recognized
they can't hold us back.
[[keyword=us]]
Isn't this what you wanted?
Something infinite?
...let's make a deal.
I'll shut the fuck up
if you'll start talking.
Author notes
"Cause you're not alone here, not at all
Let me belong here, break my fall..."
~Breaking Benjamin~ (Break my Fall)
trinsa
A contest entry
- A Plethora of One-Liners by Epilogue.
900 points, ended December 16, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
mmmm. autopsy.
Comments
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Wow! I love it! Wicked ending, you just worded this so perfectly. Only thing you should DEFINITELY change- it should read "they can't hold us back" not "the can't hold us back" Try to fix that, its just a nitpick but I hope i did well by catching it for you. Nice job. Good luck in the contest.
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lol the ending was funny... keyword us? u sure he has that in mind too? sorry if I ruined your fantasy here... just thought I'd bring some people back down to earth today... with good intentions that is seriously! anyway, tc and gl in l<3ve
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I thought your adaptation of the quote was very well done. I really really admired the fact you did not use it directly in the piece but rather formed something around it.
I'll shut the fuck up
if you'll start talking.
Simply just loved these lines. I feel like this often.
~elizabeth~
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