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Haiku 13

each and every stitch
sewn with a story
grandma's quilt

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Sai Babas Lotus
    October 16, 2007

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    I think this is really beautiful. Wonderful resonance here! I can see this visual so clearly. Love the assonance and alliteration in the haiku. I think a hyphen is needed at the end of L2. Rest seems fine.


    • Pollycheck
      October 16, 2007
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      Lotus Of Lakshmi

      Thank you for your comments and suggestions. they are appreciated.


  • NoWayJo
    October 15, 2007

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    Wonderful entry, Polly...Though my grandmother didn't quilt, she crocheted. She had stories of crochet/knitting circle meetings with friends every week and her purchases and stash of crochet-cotton that just feel to be part of each stitch of those crocheted doilies that were passed on to me. Quilt patterns sort of have a dual nature in not only the story of the quilter, but the pattern itself that you've drawn on well by this haiku.

    Thank you so much for this entry to the contest and your contribution to the haiku-quilt too! I really appreciate.

    Jo


    • Pollycheck
      October 15, 2007
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      Jo

      Thank you so much for your kind words. They are very much appreciated.