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bathroom mirror

 

 

 

 

 

warm cast lighting
and soft imagery.
such a pretty painted picture
a reflection of a dream.

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mirrors
mirrors
right there, its almost real
like slivers of a fantasy
like its your hands i feel

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just a slip of skin
smoothed under
finger tips
trace imaginary patterns
and make a shadow sharp eclipse.

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mirrors
mirrors
windows in the walls.
resembling a world i'm in
that isn't real at all.
 
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and i can't take the visions of what i've been denied
cause your only in the mirror
and your only in my mind.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Cold Blue Eyes
    October 18, 2007

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    good work

    the strongest passage begins with "just a slip of skin". I think this has alot of potential. I think there is still something that you are trying to say, but it is unsure to the reader, a hit of mystery. Keep working on it!!!

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    October 18, 2007

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    This is a good piece. I often wonder can we send messages to the other side thanks for sharing this much love


  • novacaine.
    October 15, 2007

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    okay. so this is pretty much amazing.

    love this:
    "can i send a message
    to the other side
    cause your only in the mirror
    and your only in my mind."


    • ruiven
      October 15, 2007
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      thank you for your comment darling!
      -raven