It snowed the other day. No fragile flakes,
But rather stinging, biting darts that froze
And killed and chilled with ice flat lowland lakes
Where swans once swam, now fled from icy foes.
It snowed again. And all seemed silent, cold…,
A world of grey. No living, glistening gleam
To lighten eye or ear. No hint of gold
To grace the grave of day's last dying beam.
And once again.... But winter's night-veiled death,
Enchanted now, adorned with crystal lace,
Revives, transformed by magic, vaporous breath
To carve from fear a wondrous, light-filled place.
Now winter waits, which first stormed in as foe,
Sufficient in its power…, its soothing snow.
A contest entry
- A contest for Sonnets on the change of seasons ONLY by ecrivain01.
450 points, ended October 27, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - MAKE IT SNOW!!!!! by daviscth.
400 points, ended December 14, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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ok I need a cover!
this was a wonderful read I felt I was in the snow , but now I need a blanket, aw I wish it would snow even though I know its so ever cold thanks for the reminder
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I spent a couple of years in northern Germany, where it snowed almost every day, piling up to a couple of feet (without drifts), and temperatures so low that the ink froze in our ball-point pens. But the beauty! Almost (note: ALMOST!) worth it.
thanks for the comments and the reading.
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Boy, this makes me want to curl up in front of a roaring fire with my hubby!! I'm so glad you decided to post in my contest. Thank you and all the best luck at judging. Cathy
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you have amazing talent to draw word pictures. Hey, I feel so cold after reading your winter images...I love these lines, especially:
Now winter waits, which first stormed in as foe,
Sufficient in its power…, its soothing snow.
congrats and best regards, friend. -
Throw a log on the fire!
Metamorphosis of bleakest winter, will with time and patience, change into multifaceted beauty as the sun shines. And as winter waits, we know
that Spring will soon succeed the snow.
The hardest part of winter has always been when we are not yet accustomed to its changes. Used to its cold, we become aware that there is so much more.
It was nice to see the hyphen correctly used in 'night-veiled death' and 'light-filled place.' Might it also have helped 'ice-flat lowland lakes'?
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Thanks for the comments on the poem...and on the hyphens. I don't think "ice-flat" would help, since the line is supposed to say that the flat lowland lakes were chilled with ice.
Much appreciate the close reading, though.
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Very nice ...
although the punctuation leaves something to be desired. Other than that, I like this. Thanks for entering.
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Well composed English sonnet. This piece loows like silk and the image actually made me feel cold. The volta is very subtle yet expresses the pivot. The couplet is a winderful conclusion.
Love,
Amera♥
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