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Dear Lord (Please Look After Him)


Dear Lord,

Dear Lord please heed my prayer,

all that's going on I feel unfair.

Save my love from the pain,

keep his mind clean and sane.

I know that he's done some shame,

but put it on me - I'll take the blame.

I don't ask for much just my love,

to be sheltered from up above.

To keep his pain more at ease,

just one wish for me - please?

To church or such I don't really go,

I know you must be disapointed so.

I wish he would think of me,

tell me does he do it? (can you see?)

 

Just make the pain of losing sight,

become more barable, less uptight.

Please ease the pain he feels,

help him keep warm and to keep real.
I'd do anything for him as you know,

please keep him safe wherever he goes!

I can't justify all that he has done before,

just for a moment - forgive, ignore -

I know he's good I can feel it deep inside,

to my heart he has but confide.

Just please watch over him please,

I'll do what I've never done before beg on my knees!
Just keep him safe and make him smile,

even if it's a moment, just for a while.

I pray to you to also give me some support,

through all this turmoil, loss and hurt.

I needed him by my side just as much,

I want his heart, I want his touch.

I thought he'd want me when times are tough,

I would with him if times were rough.

But it's not his fault he's quite confused,

I feel so alone Lord, so hurt and used!

Bring him happiness if it's with me or not,

thank you for listening (I almost forgot).

Just consider all I've written right here,

I seal this desperate request with a tear.

Amen.

Author notes

I never pray.
I never beg.
But I do now,
because he means so much.
God you're all I have left to hope for that you'll look after him for me. Hopefully you'll help rekindle our love that was there, I know it was... I can feel it.
He's a good guy Lord. Let him show he can be one, make him good.

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  • Eusebius
    April 2

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    Oh, this poem is very well done and so unutterably sad in the extreme... once again, very, vrey fine.....


  • Blooming Poet
    May 19, 2008
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    God can do amazing things.If things are meant to be they will work out, I promise


  • Suicidal Werewolf4U
    January 23, 2008
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    good

    i nt 1 4 blivin in god but dis really touched my heart, its sweet

  • Crackinthewall
    January 14, 2008
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    Hate to say it, but... there is no god.


  • FransB gold member
    January 6, 2008

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    I had mixed set of emotions when I read this poem. I noticed: sincerity, hurt, sadness, hope, plead, and many more - within the poet; in me it brought anger, a yearning to could sit down with you - listen and talk, also an urge to say: 'get him out of your system' (but also know this is the last thing you want to hear). This poem brings with it a variation of emotions and needless to say - thought - because it is a prayer. In the poet I sense a person who is truthful, loyal, hurt easily, but can keep this to the self, willing to forgive, willing to assess inward thoughts and feelings, has a tendency to put others first, etc., [not trying to be personal here, but asking myself who can write such a poem with such content] - I have great affinity for such people. May I add: God knows best, and while we may not always like His ways, my experience is that we always get the reason, perhaps not as soon as we would like. From the comments below, I have noticed that you have touched the heart - mine also. FransB


  • Knight70 silver member
    January 1, 2008

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    I am without words.

    Truthfully, this is one of the most beautiful prayers I have ever read. It speaks volumes of how love can hurt so much. Your prayer is such a good step in the right direction. We all need something to support us in our lives, especially when there is healing that is needed. My prayers are with you, and that it all works out. Don


  • Krimson rose
    December 28, 2007

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    I love this poem/ prayer its beautiful and it really speakes to me"I pray to you to also give me some support,

    through all this turmoil, loss and hurt.

    I needed him by my side just as much,

    I want his heart, I want his touch.

    I thought he'd want me when times are tough,

    I would with him if times were rough.

    But it's not his fault he's quite confused,

    I feel so alone Lord, so hurt and used!"

    This stansa is what really got me. I know how this feels oh to well.


    • xxRainbowDawnxx
      December 28, 2007
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      Thanks, it's not a nice thing to go through.
      Now I'm going through the depression / he hates me so life is over stage.
      Bleh, love... it hurts like hell.


  • georgie
    December 26, 2007

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    Dear Lord please heed my prayer,

    all that's going on I feel unfair.

    Save my love from the pain,

    keep his mind clean and sane.

    I know that he's done some shame,

    but put it on me - I'll take the blame.

    I don't ask for much just my love,

    to be sheltered from up above.

    To keep his pain more at ease,

    just one wish for me - please?

    To church or such I don't really go,

    I know you must be disapointed so.

    I wish he would think of me,

    tell me does he do it? (can you see?)

    this verse speaks volumes to me... your poem is a prayer and i dont think you need to go to church to do that. gods i pray on the toilet at times lol. ill light a candle for you and yours,
    hugs,
    georgie,
    xxx



  • Luken gold member
    December 21, 2007

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    I am not sure why this is the first time I have read this, honestly. But I love it.

    I feel like to me you're telling God to do what you did to him since you aren't there anymore... and I know how you feel. But see... he still loves you... no matter what he says or thinks. I don't think you should've been forced to write this because, well, you should still be together. Like I should be with Taylor. But the only thing I know that is getting me through all of this is love. You know the thing that kept you together and special to each other? Love. And it still does. He still loves you. And if not, your love for him should be a big enough of a cushion, if not the biggest, for him to fall back on and feel okay.

    "I thought he'd want me when times are tough,
    I would with him if times were rough.
    But it's not his fault he's quite confused,
    I feel so alone Lord, so hurt and used! "

    The best part of the poem for me. I felt the same. If I am willing to work and try so hard for something, why can't she? But you weren't used! You loved him. Just your love for him alone should be enough for your courage to keep on keepin' on. I know it is for me. She knows I love her, she still loves me. That fact keeps me going.

    Sorry if this was too long, but I said it mostly for me than you. Beautiful poem and being so freakishly close to my situation I could say one of my most favorite of all time.

    Toodles,
    B. Lucas

    • xxRainbowDawnxx
      December 21, 2007
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      Thank you so much for the comment

      I know I showed him all the love and the care. Since then he told me he doesn't love me anymore and he's ignoring me, not even caring when I felt suicidal. It really hurts me because I gave him my everything and stood by him even when he did things very wrong. I was always there for him and he threw it back at me, but I still love him.

      I feel so upset. I just want him to talk to me and explain to me why he doesn't love me anymore and why he wont talk to me and reason with me. It hurts a lot.

      Thanks so much for your message. Love truly does hurt.

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    December 19, 2007

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    Awww sweety this is such a sad piece and i am sorry that you have been through this i am here if you need someone to listen much love always


  • raggyann
    December 18, 2007
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    wow this is hard
    sad and lonely
    and praying
    i hope god hears your prayers bless you


  • Browneyedbaby
    November 22, 2007

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    Great

    um this is one of the most amazing poems i have ever seen ..when i tell you it amazing dont take it lightly i love it keep up the good work!!:]


  • stavykm gold member
    November 7, 2007

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    So Precious, Heart Felt

    Thank you for sharing your gift to write poetry with me. I could relate to begging God for someone to be ok. I did it about my son for years, but he just died 7 weeks ago at the young age of only 24. My heart is broken, yet I still pray deperately for my own sanity. Dear Lord Please (Look After Him) oh how I pray this too, and the first line Dear Lord please heed my prayer and the last line I seal this desperate request with a tear. Oh I can relate so much to this, just that he was my son not my lover!! Blessings to you and him Kelle Marie, stavykm


  • Best of Serendipity
    November 5, 2007

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    I never pray and sometimes question gods existence, but what you wrote here and how you expressed your emotion and how you feel, well i can feel your pain while reading it and it makes me believe in god more and gives me hope and faith in my religion. i love the rhym it adds a touch of concern and love to this prayer. i hope your prayers are heard and taken care of and that god hears your prayers. good bless you and no matter what happends continue on in writing your an amazing writer.. god bless you and good luck.


  • earthstar
    November 5, 2007

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    This touched my heart. We can not change the people we love. All we can do it give them to the Lord. We do have free will to make our own choices. I loved the depth of feeling you shared in this write.
    Bring him happiness if it's with me or not,

    thank you for listening (I almost forgot).

    Just consider all I've written right here,

    I seal this desperate request with a tear.

    These lines are the one that touched mt heart.
    Unconditional love you have shown in these lines.
    I hope all goes well take care.


  • Menace
    November 4, 2007

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    Oh wow!

    This was so very heartfelt and emotional. I wish I had someone who prayed this way for me. God knows I need it. I could relate to both sides. I let my mind and stress take me away from a lot of things. Excellent piece.


  • X iMPERFECTiON x
    November 2, 2007
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    wow very good!! so profound and nicely written. very thoughtful and kind. nice job =]


  • x-Black-Butterfly-x gold member
    October 15, 2007

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    this was a deep and beautiful write sis that was written straight from your heart
    well done and keep penning


  • Ibius
    October 15, 2007
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    A beautiful, heartfelt write. Awsome stuff.
    I hope it all works out for you.
    ~K~

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