A man am I and I,a man,
could no longer stay this very hand-
the hand that took, and hand-held was,
taken by thee and thee because,
taken by me, you were from then
'til now and ever after when
we meet beneath the starry skies
and give way to love's sweet kingdom rise,
Pris'ners now and hereafter we
comdemned forever shall we be
You with me, and me with you
man and woman, just the two,
but let our paths ne'er depart
since I promised thee my heart.
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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excellent
word choices. and beautiful subject, without making it gushy. i like this.
it is very sweet.
abby -
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it. I'm starting to get out of my poet/writer's block. I have an account at storywrite as well, and I need to finish my draft of the story so I can put it all together, but I just don't have the time. It's sad. Again thank you. I enjoyed how easily this came to me.
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