I have been dipped in a slough of black thickness,
dripping off my soul as I wade along jagged coast
sin clings to me as the dampness to midnight sand
leeches that suck feverishly, feeding upon my brain
guilt the hungry offspring, nourished on insanity;
My souls cries out, longs to be washed in the Word
crystal waters once flowing from a Kingly throne;
like your precious blood Jesus down Calvary’s Hill
in sweetest abandon for sins that had me bound;
My soul again hangs in the balance, yet You are close
do I dare crucify You again by lusts coddled as near?
a slow death, bleeding condemnation from every vein
only a prodigal’s embrace stops the flow, keeps me sane;
Sin’s fleeting pleasure, through my fingers start to slip
like foamy crest by vacant castles and empty shells silent,
though I have only driftwood, two pieces is all I need
for a cross to follow You across life’s storm tossed sea.
A contest entry
- Your Story by FindingFaith.
450 points, ended October 21, 2007, 6 entries
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a slow death, bleeding condemnation from every vein
only a prodigal’s embrace stops the flow, keeps me sane;
Just a thought on my second read through...the rhyme in the above lines is the only place it rhymes and kind of threw me.
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Lovely piece. I cannot tell you how often I have that feeling of needing to be washed in the word.
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Ah yes, I can see where you're coming from with this beautiful piece ... these are the best poems the streams of consciousness ones that just inhabit every minute of our waking life until they are emblazoned on the page (so to speak).
"Only a prodigal's embrace stops the flow, keeps me sane" ... this is the line that stands out for me; the pivot of the poem. You write from the heart and you have crafted this well. I wish you every success in the contest and also in your personal walk with JC.
Blessings,
xx
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this was extremely well written. Although I am not a person of faith your emotions, particularly describing the pull of sin in life ("do i dare crucify you by lusts coddled as near?") were spelled out carefully.
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a wonderful write. i love this line:
My souls cries out, longs to be washed in the Word
and the last lines are fabulous; it says it all
though I have only driftwood, two pieces is all I need
for a cross to follow Jesus across life’s storm tossed sea. well written, this touches deep in the soul
thank you for sharing this more need to read this.
keep writing! God bless you always
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excellent write. I really do like the last two lines the end the poem.
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I love it from start to end I need to hear this today. I love the ending. This is wonderful and feeds one soul.Keep up your faith this is what stands in the very end. I am so glad I took the time to read it. Great work.
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We all experence the pull of evil
Faith tells us that the end is best when we follow the lord. Great write! The Shaker
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i'm amazed. this was good!
~aj~
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Beautiful
This is lovely, Carly. It really reflects your spirituality and devotion to the One who created us, gave us these gifts. I'll bet He is very proud of you. Well done!
Blessings,
L.
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