large butterflies swarm
around a car as magnets
from the rain sticking
and whirling the maple leaves,
like wings flapping to a rest.
Author notes
Please bare with me a little if I tripped up, this is my first tanka try.
And, I would like you to use language cleanly just as I had done in my poem given to you in general.
A contest entry
- Delightful Shortforms by delightfulmess.
1200 points, ended October 21, 2007, 19 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
I think I wrote this nicely, we'll see
Comments
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great one congradulations on the silver trophy
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you did really well i liked this piece.
Great job.
Apparently you did real well you stole the SILVER. COngrats to you
tory -
what a original piece... 
EXCELLENT!!! thank you for entering my contest
delila
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