soaked in morning rays
porcelain crust
melt with naked heart
an ocean pearl
inside a cream shell
floats under cool waters
within fairy eyes
crystal gems mirror
the doors of heaven
a rose blossoms
upon tender lips
inviting an infinite kiss
innocence plays
among spring butterflies
spilling a new fragrance
an enchanting melody
behind fallen lashes
hymns a mystery
walls of darkened death
collapse before the light
of caramel shine
cushioned in young romance
she sleeps with a dream
awaiting her lover's call.
Author notes
Ankeeta
Just boasting myself haha
A contest entry
- BECAUSE YOU ARE MY FAVS by Swan song.
3000 points, ended April 5, 2008, 28 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Beautiful can u put users name in authors box for me and ill come back and comment on this gem
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BEAUTIFUL!!!!!
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yeh you had said the same before
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Very nice and well-written. I love it! Nice imagery as well.
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Love the pic. The words are written well. I think you broke in all the right places. Also you did not use any filler words. Each read from you gets better and better. God Bless...
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perfecto
Well, I would have titled this sleeping beauty. I would have made an attempt of a kiss to awake you, and you are seemingly in pastures new. The words are so virginal, that they proceed where the jealousy transpires, like an obsession stopping other admirers. I read this poem before, but was unable to comment. Why? Because, it was like awakening you, the peace and vibrant colour you make of this dream. I can imagine you dreamt every word, and that the "walls of darkened death collapse with a stroke
of caramel shine cushioned in pink romance she sleeps with a dream awaiting her lover's call." In other words, she is for auction to the highest bidder. I guess, I am not that wealthy. You so invite more than infinite kisses, as death is being with a soul mate or the like, and therefore, the love affair seems more spiritual than sexual. It really is up my street, how Asha sees any man..., in her dreams and very far from the reality her innocence goes in search for. Oh dear! I would title this, "The perfect woman", there are very, very few in existence, I guess we are lucky you are in this splendid sublime state.
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it is just an expression of real Ankita
...No matter how much I get bitter because of circumstances and few unnecessary people around....but the true me still rests peacefully within a dream world....may be waiting for "that" kiss..and it seems the reality would be real quite soon
thanks for that lovely compliment Tony
be blessed
kita
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ooooh you look so pretty babe gorgeous!
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thanks to the photographer
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WONDERFUL!!
Oh, the anticipation of waiting for the one your heart belongs to to call you. I have that longing but no one who will ever call. 
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beautiful!
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It is simply amazing the power of a single kiss. And it seems the gentler the kiss the more powerful it is. I think we have focused our attention in the wrong direction. Instead of harnessing the energy of atoms to create explosive power, maybe we should be trying to harnessing the power of a kiss? Ithica
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I love this poem! Its very personal and i love that you could post this cuz i wouldnt i would be to scared! but neways great poem. really great descriptions! and the emotion was great! good luck!
~kyrsti~
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brilliant
I loved it, who cares about boasting this was a wonderful and up lifting read. Thank you for sharing.
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Special like...
Awww..I feel that it ended a bit too soon!..heehee..but then again this is like a very beginning of something special. "She sleeps with a dream awaiting a lover's call" that was a nice ending that wrapped it all. So can a kiss mean so much for a girl?...because to me that fourth stanza was simply stunning for a very special and recent reason and you have penned well what lies behind that sense of infinity...heehee! Yesh yesh..bring on the sweetness!
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Something special always begins within a true and a faithful heartsometimes a single kiss can mean everything to a girl...yet it depends from girl to girl lol
and may I know why the fourth stanza was so special to you?
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Well hey there beautiful. You're back. It's nice to see you here again, we were all starting to get worried. Hope everything is well with you...
If not I have a shoulder...or a couch...
DANNY
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Hey thanks Dan..
I have been keeping a lot busy these days…most of the time I am outdoors…we have navratri (one of our Indian festivals) at my place...this time I myself took the initiative to get a make over for my entire house lol…I had always loved to design and decorate interiors...and looking at the changed deco I already gota contract from one of my close friends lol...will send you the pics soon…
Also getting things finalized for my masters…just handling wonderful and new colors around
Be blessed
kita
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Wow. That was absolutely beautiful, Kita. Your words always flow so well.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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