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Insomnia (Metaphors for Darker Times)

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I am trapped
Somewhere between dusk and dawn-
Where honey-dew horizon
drifts just beyond the soft of fingertips

The world stops.
The world breathes.
I run, defiant, 
with hush whispering at my heels.

And after time,
Exhausted,
I wait-

Consumed by darkness
in hyperbolic poetic solitary,

I wait,
For the forgiving light
of new mourning to break.



Author notes

This was a bit of a thought-dump.

I guess it stands as both a literal depiction of living through the world going dark (night time as an insomniac) and a metaphorical depiction of living through darkness.

Wasn't intended at the outset but I think it kinda works.

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  • Virgoan silver member
    October 24, 2007

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    Beautiful! Most of the time I am submerge into the moment wherein aside from being an insomniac, I fall into the pit of darkness as I reminisce the stage of my life.

    Well done my friend


  • just a voice
    October 15, 2007
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    Great job here. This is awesome. As are all of your poems... Again, great job.


  • simplypeace
    October 15, 2007

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    this is really beautiful. "with hush whispering at my heels" is my favorite line. it just sounds lovely and perfect.


  • liquidmindforever
    October 15, 2007
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    Interesting scheme and use of metaphor
    LOVE
    LIGHT
    TRUTH
    liqud


  • funny valentine
    October 15, 2007

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    I love

    I am trapped
    Somewhere between dusk and dawn-
    Where honey-dew horizon
    drifts just beyond the soft of fingertips

    brava my dear. Def worth reading.


  • Layne
    October 15, 2007

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    This was great, I love this line "Consumed by darkness
    in hyperbolic poetic solitary" I have a poem called "Writers Block" that says I am being locked in a "Poets Penetentiary", I can relate to that and this was a good poem, also liked "with hush whispering at my heels", this poem was simple yet very creative!


  • LadyUnique silver member
    October 15, 2007

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    i like this... a lot!
    'honey-dew horizon' is original and stimulates the senses. same with 'soft of fingertips' and 'hush whispering at my heels'.
    'hyperbolic poetic solitary' has to be my favorite phrase though. i've been there and it's not a lonely place. to me it's comforting
    'forgiving light of new mourning' emphasizes that each day brings a new start.
    this is going into my favorites list
    i also like 'thought-dump'... it's perfect though this poem does not come across as that to me

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