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Two little girls uncontrollable laughter

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I hope you had an Uncle Bill in your family,

A soulful man, beaming bright eyes, whose smile reflected in yours!

You just wanted to hug him, keep him all to yourself.

Ever known a man like that?

 

Saturday night’s were dancing nights, The Elks Club. 

Sweethearts of Swing they were!

All the ladies would ask Auntie Fran, if they could dance with him.

He had a suave lead, gentle ease, enticing scent,

that man always smelled good. 

 

                 It was one fateful dancing night when laid upon the floor ,

         Uncle Bill slipped away into the night, door of heaven slammed tight,

                                              keeping him forever.

 

“Not my Uncle Bill, mama, Not my Uncle Bill,”

we ALL cried ourselves to sleep that night.

Innocence soft sighing prayer,

"I didn't get to say good bye."

 

Have you ever experienced a Full Irish Service?

You’d think you were at a New Years Eve party!

That is just the way he would have wanted it.

 

Little Michelle and I were best of friends,

cousins one year apart.

We stood by Auntie Fran in reception line.

Trying to be strong for her, to hide our grief,

painful tummy aches. We kept smiling saying,

“I love you in our kindest way.”

 

Then one fragile looking woman reached out

her hand to Auntie Fran , so polite did say,

 “ I am so Honored to have been his last dance.”

 

The words that stumbled out of my mouth,

I can’t believe still…….I looked in horror at Michelle,

opened wide my mouth,

“Did you hear that?"

                       That’s the lady who danced our Uncle Bill to death!” 

                       We both stood there staring, watching her.

Auntie Fran was so gracious, gave her tender hug.

 

I just don’t want to recall what happened….can you?

You guessed it right!

 

                     WE GOT THE GIGGLES

                     our  aching tummies were full of air…

                                         the harder we tried to hold it in?

                                                             the Louder and LOUDER we got!

 

                  For some ungodly reason, it was just so damn funny,

                                        we just fell apart holding on to each other,

                                                            laughing our guts out!

                                                                       tears rolling down our faces!

 

Oh, lord in heaven, I swear to you, we could not stop!

 Auntie Fran gave us "the death ray glare."

The harder we tried to hold it in…..the more n more it hurt.

We tried to cover our faces buried within our little fingers, 

that didn’t   work  out   so   well……..either!

 

Then cousin Karen came and asked...... what’s the matter?  
….that’s when I spilled the beans…..shot myself in the head,
a full six rounds

                   “that’s the woman who danced our Uncle Bill to death.” 

 

A look of OUTRAGE  is upon Auntie Fran’s face.

Little Karen ran away crying to her mother.

Michelle said, ‘we better get out of here,"

ran like a torpedo, bathroom door slamming behind her.

 

There I was ,  facing death squad marksman,   Auntie Fran!

Great patience this woman had,

I can’t even imagine how I would react ?

She said with a beet red face,

 

1.        You will apologize to her, Mrs. Whatever

                 (killer of Uncle Bill)

2.        You will apologize to me for being so rude.

3.        You will stay out of my sight for at least one hour.

 

I did what I was told, just Happy to be Alive!

 

Of course, when word got back to my mother,

it was a different story!  

The screaming ride home and punishment for a week- a grounding.

 

Michelle and I are full grown women now.

 We look upon that day with rolled eyes and a groan.

 

                            Two little girls uncontrollable laughter

                                         the final good bye to our

                                                    Uncle Bill.


 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

This is the last day of my celebration week-what a really
blessed week it has been.
In case I missed any of you, please accept my thank you for your gracious comments and constructive notes,
they really do help.

p.s. thankyou Auntie Fran for your kind patience
and understanding. A smalll part of me wants to believe
that Uncle Bill too thought this was really funny,
just the way he would have wanted it!

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  • thepoetsings
    July 5, 2008

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    My editorials:

    - line 5. "nights" doesn't need the apostrophe.
    - line 7. No comma after Fran
    - line 13. Capitalize "Mama"
    - line 18. "Year's" needs an apostrophe
    - line 22. Did you mean to put "the" before "reception"?
    - line 46. "Lord" should be capitalized
    - There are also a few places where you open quotations that you might want to capitalize the first letter within that quote.

    I will be back to comment further when judging. Thank you for your entry

  • ecrivain01
    November 4, 2007

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    I think ...

    Bob would have liked this. It doesn't fit the contest, of course, so it has no chance of winning anything, but I do think he would have liked it.


  • daviscth silver member
    November 1, 2007

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    LOL. This is such a wonderful story to pass down to future generations!!! Tales like this should live forever! I'm quite certain you are thankful she didn't kill you!! Thank you for posting this in my contest and I wish you all the best with it. Cathy


  • BXs Finest
    October 22, 2007
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    GUD RIGHT....GUD LUCK


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    October 16, 2007

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    Hahahhaha, brilliant story. What a great story that was. Children get the giggles at the most inopportune moments. I was exactly like that. The more I got told off, the more I could not hold back. I think it was 'nerves' more than cheekiness. Wonderful imagery here too. This was very sad, but he died enjoying himself to the last - and not many people will be able to do that.

    Wayne
    x


  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    October 15, 2007

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    Sharing seems to be huge on AP today...This is a wonderful story and Im so grateful to have this memory with me now as well..
    Children are allowed these things in life...I dont think I could have scolded my child for this feeling..
    Thank you so much for sharing..
    Peace
    ~A~


  • storiesuntold gold member
    October 15, 2007

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    Wonderful and sad too

    Yes in reading its almost like your Uncle knew he loved to hear your laughter and in the moment got his last wish from his two favorite girls .


  • Anguas-Confusion gold member
    October 15, 2007

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    A great poem, really descriptive encounter. Keep writing and sharing with us your experiences. x-x-x


  • ArcticAngel
    October 15, 2007

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    aww i loved this, made me laugh at parts and cry in others! welldone loved it keep up the writng xoxox


  • moluv10
    October 15, 2007
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    Very Funny! I bet you two girls had a blast growing up! I really enjoyed reading this!


  • Hello...No.One.Home silver member
    October 15, 2007

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    That was so funny and I can imagine the punishment when you got home, I'm known to laugh in inappropriate times because I'll take things the the funny way, but then again my family are use to it.

    anyway lovely peom and well written, with great flow.

    keep writing and having wonderful ideas.

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