Slit your wrists
Live your life
Cut yourself
Pay the price
Cut too deep
Hit a vein
Blood pours put
Release of pain
Cold inside
Too hard to live
Gave it all
Whats left to give
Hit the floor
Bleed to death
One swift move
Laid to rest
Went too far
Was too depressed
No emotion
Didn't cry
No regret
Just pain inside.
Please tell me what you think
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I used to cut myself. This poem brings it all back. Fabulous imagery
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hoollly that dark but i kind of liked it! good job. well if you want you can check out some of my things if you have time!!!!
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oh my goodness. i love your poem. but its really sad.great job.
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wow
dark
and brutal
but tragically beautiful!
well done
no changes needed
♥ Dani -
I was digging this until the second the last stanza, it just didn't keep up with the rhyme. There was rhythm, but it didn't quite sync. a bit of revision and this could be a wonderful, brutal piece.
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wow i normally dont like rhyme poems, but this one i did like. twas a good one, i felt many emotions behind it. and i thought the flow of this poem was very well. though, i feel as if more puncuation could be used. over all a good poem. keep this work up!
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