A ripple passes
Thru cold, frosted trees
Calling, calling,
Forth the power
Of Resistance
Hear the whisper among the trees
Hissing thru branches
Heralding new life
Telling, telling
Of fortune and abundance
Hear the whisper of the woods
Screaming thru brush
Witness to all
Yearning to spread
Thru Everlasting Life
Hear the whisper of the soul
A ripple passing by
Among the lillies
And the thorns
Summoning, Summoning
The Gift of Listening
Hear the whisper in the trees
Author notes
Freewrites are fun... you should try it.
Please tell me what you think.
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kokosheartbroken259
holy cow!!! i love this one even more than angels! this is pretty much what i feel or listen to when i'm alone in the woods - which is hardly ever. i also might suggest changing this to "Hear the Whisper" instead of "Ripple." just thought i'd suggest it. if it were my poem, that's what i'd call it. whatever you wanna do works though!
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WOW
OH my gosh! I totally love this! its like beat poetry, excellent, excellent write, great word usage, here love the repitition, the subtlty behind this piece is good, a more hopeful message for the future, very nature connected. I love poems about nature, and the natural world, this is great, I believe its my new favorite of yours, great job girl
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I like the feel of this poem. It has an interesting message in it. Might I suggest though, changing "Witness to all" to "Witnessing to all"? Just a thought.
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Thank you for the comment and suggestion, I need to ponder it and see what I come up with.... Thanks!
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