Twisted, bent and tormented
by your inconsistencies
I entered your darkness a long time ago
and it has been eating me up alive
not knowing where your next betrayal
will come from
You thrive on my weaknesses
laughing at my pain
diabolical and proud
knowing you are in control
You are my obsession
I am nothing but the exhaust vapor
of an empty heart
The need for you filling my every crevice
There is no escaping you
My stomach making churning sounds
but I cannot feed it
I am alive only in your presence
You are toxic to my system
yet I stay addicted
Tears cannot ease the pressure
I am drained
feeling a numbness through me
that swallows me whole
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A contest entry
- Cleaning out the closet [My Favourites Only] by Naridill.
425 points, ended November 9, 2007, 49 entries
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Such intriguing emotion that you have penned, the picture also fits so well with the imagery and creative thoughts.
Thanks for entering and much luck
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DEEP EMOTION!!!
One does feel so helpless when their emotions for another are deep and sincere.
The other does often take advantage of this and use you for their personal entertainment.
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Painfully true!I am alive only in your presence You are toxic to my system Yet I stay addicted!...Cant live with them but cant live without them!...You are the Queen of broken heart
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very artistic like poem great job keep up the good work!!!
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Wow! This is dark! I love the imagery of this piece in relation to the picture. Loved it!
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wow this was amazing hun and so strongly penned with imagery emotions and depths
i loved it well done and keep penning
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twisted...
...but resist it,even when u miss it...GREAT although
dark n' obsessive this is still a very well written piece!
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We have all had a love we knew was wrong for us! But, oh the aches and the wants of desire. How interesting this poem is. Amazing that it goes so well with the picture. ~Sie
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OH BB! Absolutely gut wrenching, I know you and I have had a discussion about this, and about the addiction of some people that lead to toxoicity but you have blown my socks off with this....I will not forget this line for a long time..."I am nothing but the exhaust vapor
of an empty heart
The need for you filling my every crevice "
GIRLIE, all I can say is you give it right from the soul...I love you!
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