Liquid black sweats from pen to paper.
The wise winker, his soul opaque.
Judgemental eyes sear through his mind.
Nothing.
The clock continues to click.
The years continue to pass by gently.
But no words may he utter.
No knowledge great enough to be spoken.
To be heard.
He has one thought whilst one has one million.
Though his thought much deeper, more concise, comprehended.
Scratching the surface of intellect.
A breakthrough.
One thought but uncomplete, broken,
Damaged by years of abuse.
A sigh that would rattle shakespeares bones.
Silence.
Clocks ticking near but far away,
While in his mind he becomes a philosopher.
Author notes
Hmm, something to confuse you all...
A contest entry
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You really want to know what he is thinking don't you?
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O.o something to think about. This is little confusing, but it sounds really cool! I love the last line of the third stanza, this is just such a neat poem!!!!! Anyways good luck in my contest and keep up the good work. ^^
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thats ridiculously amazing! I read that twice i loved it so much lol xxxx
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welcome to allpoetry!
This is brilliant! The choice of words are excellent and the form well done. I love the word choice, opaque for example. The punctuation is also great, placed in the correct sentences for pause and stop.
Well done
Faerie
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This is beautiful and extremely thought prevoking.
I really like the first lines of this, it's an excellent opener. Sometimes I find a lot of punctuation makes it not flow as well, but that isn't the case with this piece, great write. -
I really enjoyed this and especially enjoyed the sense of time throughout it, although I think third stanza fifth line down should be "incomplete" I think.
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wow
well first i dint quite grasp the full imensity of this piece but after reading the comment that you left on of the other parons to you work, i can understand it a little better,i do like it but it did confuse the hell out of me, i mean how can somone understand this after work, lol, well done hunny, keepon writting and peace out, yours if you want me -freedom of soul-
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are you a philosopher! really
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the thought
it is not known.
have you never had that thought were you feel you know the answer to evolution/life and death/why we exist and where do we go after death?
can you ever grasp that thought long enough to tell anyone?
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Yes, I am confused. Where is the actual thought?
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