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Sensual (18+)

I lay down beside you,
You touch my body.
You become my soul.
You caress my being.
Slowly we become one,
Gently you enter and press your body against me.
So much pleasure and passion.
Between us nothing,
Your fingers intertwine mine,
I squeeze so I don't scream.
The feeling is indescribable.
You breathe hard into my ear,
I hear you quietly moan.
I love that sound.
You gradually get louder.
Because you get louder so do I,
It comes...
Powerful, beautiful, amazing.
Lasting for what seems like forever
And as it slowly stops,
Movement becomes slower and even more sensual.
Heavy breaths become steadier.
We lay in each other's arms.
Quietly and gently sleep overcomes the both of us,
And we are forever.

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This is a work in progress and I would welcome any comments. Thanks
Leslie

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  • Sam-a-nantha
    November 17, 2007

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    Very interesting. I like the approach you took with this. It's a little different than any of the other ones I've read. Impressive.


  • Dragonsong silver member
    October 26, 2007

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    oooh very nice, very sensual and erotic... I love the discription of souls becoming one, for that is truly the essance of any D/s relationship.

    Thank you for taking the time to enter my contest, and good luck

    Dragonsong


  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    October 24, 2007
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    oops

  • Viyanna Rosemarie silver member
    October 24, 2007
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    i would so like to thank you so very much for this fine entry into my contest for david. it is truly appreciated more than you can possibly know. am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future and i wish you the best of luck in this contest. viyanna rosemarie


  • Blue Rew silver member
    October 23, 2007

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    This is a softly erotic write. Although I find it does not pertain to my theme; I found it to be a wonderful effort in sensual feeling. I wish you the
    best with this. Blue


  • CherryOnTop
    October 23, 2007
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    This is erotic and passioniate. Good luck in the contest.


  • DrunkenRam
    October 22, 2007
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    Guilty

    This is good, Make it longer I was almost there.
    Good Luck.


  • DrunkenRam
    October 22, 2007
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    Guilty


  • RedwingSpirit silver member
    October 22, 2007
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    This is very good Good Luck in my contest

    Ignore Drunkenram he's retarded and also my silly husband


  • BlackBloodyRose
    October 21, 2007
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    wow. very emotional but still not too grafic i love the way you word things

  • the chase
    October 21, 2007
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    I like the image I get towards the end of the poem. I am quite the romantic.


  • Mykeee
    October 20, 2007

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    Its paced very well without getting graphic which begs the reader to use their imagination. I like it. A little more imagery but I think it is a good piece.


  • Paulies Cracker
    October 16, 2007
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    oh wow this was so very hott... thank you so much... i really liked this... good luck!

  • near1202apocalypse
    October 14, 2007
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    erotic but passionate!

    This made me smile after i read it! all i can say is Beautiful!

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