Your fraudulent kisses
Covered my nakedness
Your touch left insincere fingerprints
The words you whispered
Into the darkness
As we lay together
Each and every one
A BLUFF, A RUSE
You lavished me in compliment
And scammed my sensibilities
With counterfeit affections
Sickly sweet superficially
Bitter at the core
I invested in the delusion
Confident in your reliability
Until the mask you wore cracked
Rendering your disguise inadequate
This facade of fakery and guile
Convinces no more
For your love was a forgery
Nothing more than
A mock imitation
Blatant perjury of the heart
Fabricated for the embezzlement
Of sacred, guarded treasures
You are an imposter, a scoundrel
This practiced pretense of deception
Worn like a coat
You masquerade as a decency impersonator
But, hindsight reveals your true nature
Author notes
I used the above picture as a prompt.
A contest entry
- Fractured Gullibility by Menace.
550 points, ended October 21, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Wow, I can definately see why this won gold, I know a faker just like this one and I think even you described him to a tee, perfect wording and imagery
Karen
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This is rich in emotions and images. You painted a picture of the picture with your words and I congratulate you on the gold trophy you received for this. To be used in such a way leaves one feeling so demeaned. What goes around comes around and some day those who deceive in that way will get their payback many times over. Excellent piece you did here. Keep writing poet. seamaiden ♥
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This is a wonderful, and sad, truth too often felt by hearts easily bruised. I applaud you for the bitter rawness in this. I think most of us have been on the recieving end of this write at least once. Such hurt is it to be used, and tossed aside. Thank you for penning such a wonderful poem full of talent on such a delicate topic.
Blessed be,,
Billie Jean
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Wuah! Great wording in this one, they really fit just the way you used them. It's not everyday you see this good word play in a poem and it really is a talent to be good at it! The flow is wonderful and the poem is easy to read, even though it is about a hard topic. A lot of people go through this in life and it always hurts. It's hard for anyone to know who another person really is, as anyone out there can keep secrets. People, like the one you discribed, are the best at it.
This is a wonderful, wonderful piece and definately one of the best I've read in a while. Wonderful work with this one!
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I see why you won GOLD, very good poem you got penned here. Thanks for sharing, looking forward to readng more of your work.
e
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this is great im glad i read it so real of life the flow works is great your use of words to describe the deciteful act are really well picked great writing congrats on the gold (:
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This rocked!! I have totally been there... and the unmasking of someone's true nature is often a shock...and you kick yourself that you should have known better!! Sigh...
Wonderful writing ... I'll definitely read more of you!
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this poem is awesome! i love the line "blatant perjury of the heart"
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Excellent poem good use of words congrats on the gold this is my favorite part
Nothing more than
A mock imitation
Blatant perjury of the heart
Fabricated for the embezzlement
Of sacred, guarded treasures -
So exceptional and beautiful
raw and brutal truths.......oh that gave me goosebumps,
talented, talented writer you ARE!
Thankyou for sharing this with us.
It vivid and clear and you grabbed by us our guts!
ears2hearyou
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Wow. That was absolutely fantastic. I don't know how I missed this. You did such a fantastic job with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
Write on.
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Wow. That was absolutely fantastic. I don't know how I missed this. You did such a fantastic job with the prompt. Best of luck in the contest.
Write on.
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OMG sweetie this was brilliant!!!
Your fraudulent kisses
Covered my nakedness
Your touch left insincere fingerprints
love this, love it all, i have no brilliant comments to give you as this was awesome.
Best of luck
Tasha
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Fucking amazing!
I love this poem! I can'teven pick a fav part. The imagery and emotion is too good to seperate. Thanx for entering and good luck!
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"your love was a forgery"
"You masquerade as a decency impersonator"
"This facade of fakery and guile"
Excellent poem!
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wow this was amazing and held so many emotions within it
it was strongly penned and i loved it
well done and best of luck
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Damn. What can I even say?? This is such a very well spoken piece of angst, merged with layers of animosity for the thought. Strong indeed, your take on this prompt is very intriguing, and extremely vivid to say the least. Best wishes in the contest babe!
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