Malignant in malice,
malevolence of heart.
Malison of spoken word,
magical layers of art.
Luminous lambent in ice,
understandable burnished.
Auroral matters of soul,
mirrored; gloom furnished.
Swirling shades, succulent
with field's of blooms blurred.
perfected in years by men of mind,
till not does one know the occurred.
Author notes
POW
Theme-
Trichotomy, the diversion into three parts. In this instance into three stanza's, the first over Darkness and whats wrong. The second over the light in the world, whats right. And the last over the shades of grey created by lies and deciet, covered with sugar until whats wrong seems right and whats seems wrong.
A contest entry
- Poem of the Week (POW) by Arkbear.
750 points, ended October 15, 2007, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Black, White, And Shades of Gray. -Contrast- by sleepingINblackRain.
700 points, ended November 9, 2007, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
Comments
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The topic is lovly, although the flow seems a bit choppy i love the use of such magnificent words
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I am not even going to pretend that I understand the whole of this poem.
Your author notes helped a lot in that area though, and gave me a fresh perspective on subsequent readings, so thank you for that. 
I agree with Bear that the alliteration is a tad bit overdone. It hurt the flow, as did your very last line. I thought you did a great job with the punctuation and presentation though, with a very interesting and unique title.
Thank you so much for your entry and good luck. I hope to see you again in future PO contests.
Best wishes,
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Well done.
It seems to show how the hatred and all of the gloom is caused by ourselves, in an interesting way.
Depression, covered by the mask of a happy face.
Or, perhaps, just beauty.
Or money.
The facade of reality.
Beautifully written, and, good luck in the contest.
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In a way it is just that! The way that whats known now of right and wrong, the facade as well, have been shaped into somthing wanted; but not entirely true to it's actual meaning. Thanks ^_^
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If you look on my page, when it speaks of chaos, it says much the same, but not a similar style, especially considering that it wasn't a poem.
Oh, and, no problem.
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Dang.....nice ~
Well....you have once again penned another great entry ~
....however.....your alliteration is a weeee bit over done.....but not bad ~
The reason I say this, is for Flow reasons ~
We must watch out for Flow.....very important to a Judge who is reading numerous poems in a day ~
I Judge many poems, and I will say that you are one of the best Young Poets I have encountered ~
15!!
Wow.....I can only imagine what you're going to be penning years from now ~
Please remember, only ( 1 ) POW per Poet, per Month....but please try to stay in the POD & the POM until next month for another POW ~
I am eager to see how your talents are used ~
Loved your Title ~
Presentation is soooo lovely, as you have an eye for true art and display ~
This is a terrific Theme for sure......you have made it perfectly clear in your Authors' Notes, and you penned some incredible words and thoughts here, and we thank you for that ~
You are truly a great Young Poet :)
Let's see how your entry scored in my opinion!
Good luck,
Bear ~
Title 9.75
Flow 8.75
Depth 9.5
Theme 10
Feelings 9.3
Grammar 9.75
Presentation 10
Uncommonness 10
Sit & Ponder Affect 10
Ability to follow Rules 10
Bears Score: 97.05
Superb penning ~
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