In thy deepest forests, in thy twilight glades
Cast down thy glory, oh queen of shades
From your towering Kurnak mountains and to thy sapphire streams
Cast down thy distant, fading light, of splendid silver beams
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Breathe from thy beaming lips a sigh
A wanderer is born
The wind that travels far and nigh
With the coming of the dawn
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And thy veins of sapphire hue
Does gently stream along shaded banks
With the falling of nightly dew
Lavishly sprinkled from thine hand
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Flowers of Ethalis, like golden rain lies strewn
Upon each greening slope or valley, by every tree yet known
And blooming in the forest glades are flowers of Marrathan
Hiding shyly their nodding heads in reverence of man
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From the mighty falls of Rautarr to the banks of lake Tajkar
This be the Zarithrian empire, realm of king Katta-E-Zarr
Ruler of Maer-Neth, Rath Vael to the land of Cath-Liarr
Though to the east still Cath Quel stands free, the land of Al-Karlinarr
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Beautiful (is) the fruit born from out that silver womb
Pastures of green like emeralds unfolds below the face of the moon
And dewdrops tingle in the dark undergrowth
While above the waters of Tajkarr mosquitoes dances in silver sparkling rows
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And in the forest of Siel, there dwells in silence deep
The mystery of lives once lived, for whom the wolves lament and weep
Their voices rising solemnly towards the nightly sky
Crying from within their hearts a bittersweet goodbye
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Nestled in the forest shade
There dwells in peace, the starlit glades
In the greening fields of Liarra and Rimar
Where the diamond stars of old does sparkle from afar
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By borders four there dwells a city, from out the dark its towers (are) rising
Light does shine from every window, from nieces, torches the sky is brightening
And peace dwells quietly throughout the land
Governed firmly by his hand
Our beloved king, Katta-E-Zarr....
Author notes
I am really quite nervous about posting this one, for the fictive Zarithrian realm is a long time project of mine, a fantasy universe deeply intertwined with an other work of mine, upon which I have worked since the age of 16.
Well, a quick summery of the plot...
in ancient times mankind were united as one, although some people possessed powers that by their kinsmen where regarded as unnatural, in short they had some connection to the spiritual world. ( as for now they are going under the term of druids, but that may very well change)
Due to ignorance and fear the tribe divided into two factions, followed by an all out war, in which all druids where slain, Save for the two brothers, Marrcharl and Rushna. Hunted night and day by their former kinsmen, the two of them accepted an offer presented to them by a malevolent spirit/demon and from that merge was born the race of vampires.
This poem however does not speak of the vampires, nor druids but of the glory of the human empire that in time expanded to cover most of the world - the Zarithrian empire, consisting of the 3 realms of Rath Vael, Maer Neth and Cath-Liarr - hence the name of the capitol, Trigorr, symbolizing that triple unity.
A fourth realm, Cath Quel, is located to the east but as for this poem it bears little importance.
This poem contains a lot of names - most of them being references a specific landmarks in my world. On name however does differ - and the name is that of Al-Karrlinar located in the eastern realm of Cath Quel.
The name refers to one of the two vampire kingdoms, created by the two brothers mentioned earlier.
But that is a different story, one that I intend to post on this page soon.
(btw. the Zarithrian empire is named after the ruler mentioned within the text who united the countries and thus created the empire)
Rnjoy
Zarokk666
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Amazing... Wow. Rather elaborate, which is even better. Thanks for entering. This was great and well thought out.
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erm... wow. well then thats really interesting because i like the fact that this is completely of your own fabrication. this made it much more intriguing if a little more difficult to grasp. but uhm wow really really well done and thank you for the entry. also thank you for the little summary that helps a bit. ^^ well good luck
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Very good poem, and a brilliant story your working on (wich I think I've told before) I'm afraid I can't come with some clever corrections or whatever you call it, I think the idear for the story is absolutly briliant (one I would surely read) and your poem would make it honor.
I have to say your the best writer of the two of us.
Piela
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