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Metastatically bonded

Snippet of flesh...
My flesh
So meticulously taken from me
Stamped in circular pain
Tiny pinch of cancerous cells

Blood stained cervix
Organ tissue that weeps
At such momentary assault

We are one,
My organs and me
Metastatically bonded

We say nothing can make us weak…
Although we’re lying
because we feel fragile

Struggle
Amongst cell and soul
Science and spirit collide
then unite
but only at times
when the contaminated parts seem to be separate…

Inhibited cell growth
Monstrous lesion
Proliferating
I know you are hungry
for my body

There are parts of me I wish you wouldn’t eat

Author notes

AnaRexic


*Self Disgust*

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  • silverscent gold member
    December 29, 2008

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    Very powerful write. The terms "cancerous" is something I can relate to as I've had the C word pop up in my life recently. But overall this is a striking poem. Well done. Thanks for entering.


  • ASmileForYou
    December 17, 2008

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    Very nice! It accurately depicts the struggle. The tone is perfect for the poem. Thank you for entering!


  • Repetitious Chaos
    January 31, 2008

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    Thank you for your entry! Good luck in this contest.
    "..Struggle
    Amongst cell and soul.." -- Love it.


  • Fairies on Fire
    January 29, 2008

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    Stunning, this is crafted very, very well. Shocking but not vulgar, raw without being to attention-seeking.
    It weakened once, in this stanza "We say nothing can make us weak…
    Although we’re lying
    because we feel fragile" describing you and your organs as 'we' in the previous lines felt natural because it kind of emphasises how you are separate to, and therefore not in control of, your own body. But insinuatingyour organs speak ? that stretched the boundries a little for me, it was a little hiccup but it threw me. The last line was gorgeous and a perfect end. Take care lovely, xx


    • AnaRexic
      January 29, 2008
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      Thank You!!

      Well our organs are a part of us and in a way separate (their own entity) hence the line:

      “We are one,
      my organs and me
      Metastatically bonded”

      However they do speak to us in ways, such as pain …it’s a metaphor for my body feeling weak/giving up on fighting a disease…

      Which basically sums up this poem…it’s a battle with myself being able to cope with and be accepting of the fact that these parts of me that are cancerous may be they’re own separate entity but they are a part of me and cant be ignored.

      I see what you’re saying and appreciate your comment (but will keep it as is)! Thank You!!

      • Fairies on Fire
        January 29, 2008
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        Ah ok, no worries, it just seemed the weakest part of a beautifully written poem (only the three lines i quoted, the ones you quoted I loved anyway )
        take care xxx


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    January 28, 2008
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    great write, best of luck in the contest.

    ♥
    whisper

  • Tercarro
    January 28, 2008

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    Challenging

    I love your discussion and the challenge you have with this intrusiveness. I was touched how at your focus and the life you gave this work.
    Good stuff and it made me think.
    TC


  • N e a r
    January 27, 2008

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    I like it a lot. Your ending was perfect, and it went well with the rest of the poem. You have a talent, and you use it well.

    Thanks for entering your write at A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S ! Good luck!



    M a r l u x i a


  • Dak
    January 21, 2008

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    Hmm interesting the way you use such clinical terms, yet filter in so much different emotions, thank you for entering this into my contest.


  • azlyn gold member
    January 17, 2008
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    Edgy write for certain...thanks for the entry and best of luck!!!

    Az


  • ellipsist
    November 3, 2007
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    !

  • ellipsist
    October 15, 2007

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    the ending leaves me feeling a bit dirty, which is effective and I hope the kind of thing you hoped to achieve... the descriptions seem quite technical/medical/clinical... eve graphic at times... I like the piece, especially the disturbing (to me) ending and hope that you will comb through for spelling errors so that I don't have to remove this from my contest...

    • AnaRexic
      October 15, 2007
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      thanks

      i'm glad you could read into the meaning...this poem is actually touching on something very medical and a disease that IS indeed dirty. i ran a spell check, sorry about that...i was running a two hours of sleep


  • Menace
    October 14, 2007

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    I'm impressed. It has a gruesome rawness to it like something you shouldn't witness, but you just keep staring. Nicely done!

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