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Without You

I repeat over and over the songs that we used to listen to together,
As our lips touched and I promised you I would never let go.
Beyond these petty words can describe it rips me apart,
Beyond the pain of all wounds it slices into my heart.
What is it that I have to do to redeem myself?
The feelings that weren't there before now haunt me continuously,
But that is only a small part of the key to your heart that I shattered with my grip.
Without you I know I'll never survive in this merciless world,
Without you I know that nothing will ever make sense again.
All of this pain I deserve,
All of the anguish I am going through is nothing compared to what I did to you.
All the words I know can't even begin to express my guilt.. my sorrow.. my regret.
I lay beaten and mutilated on the blood soaked ground,
Wishing for a better life and wishing for just one last embrace.
Something to keep me going through this hell of a life.
I know your emotions cannot be swayed and I know you've finally given up.
I know not a single word of comfort will utter from those beautiful lips,
Not another look will brighten my day,
No more of your guidance to light my way.

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  • Tarja
    October 14, 2007

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    I think that it is so very unhealthy to feel this passionately about a person. Don't get me wrong... I am so in love with my husband but... you should never rely your life on someone elses... you know? This was very sweet and sad.. Love it.


    • Shado
      October 14, 2007
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      I understand, and I'm trying to learn how to get over her and move on, but it's extremely hard. She was the first person I ever truly loved, I'm sure of it. It really IS unhealthy and I don't like it at all, and I'm trying to change but.. yeah, like I said before, very hard.


  • imperfectperfection
    October 14, 2007

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    Emotional

    It is a very emotional write that expresses your feelings in simple words that have captured the depths of the ocean, ocean of your expressions. Nice flowing poem. Guilt no matter how much we express haunts us until we forgive ourselves by not repeating our own wrong actions. Very nice writting. Thanks for sharing.. take care Minoo


    • Shado
      October 14, 2007
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      Wow.. thanks a bunch for the comment. I really appreciate it!