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Forbidden Love

I know you love me truly,
I can see it in your eyes.
I know you care for me deeply,
It's not hard to see past your disguise.

 

I know you think of me every night,

I can feel the tug on my heart.

I can only pray that you might,

Feel the tug of my love on yours.

 

I want to dance to our melody.

I want to dance the dance of our love.

But luck would have it that society,

Tore you right out of my arms.

 

They'd say it's wrong,

For you to be with me.

They'd look at us with pity and disgust,

But our love will be forever strong.

 

We share an unspoken world of love,

Foreign to all who know us.

And though we've never whispered a word,

We both know eachother's secret.

 

Soon will our love be to strong,

To keep bottled up inside?

One day will we run away,

To make our dream world reality?

 

I know you love me truly,

I can see it in your eyes.

And I pray for that faithful day when we,

Break through our disguise.

 

When I can say 'I love you',

And have you say it back.

When we can freely dance to our love,

And only be judged from above.

 

 

 

Author notes

This poem is about two people that love each other and are completely compelled to each other, and they both know it, but they dare not speak of it, even to each other, because of the way society would look at it, how people would label their being together as wrong. While the emotions of love pervailed in the poem may not be 100% true for me, the strong disdain for society and their judgmental ways is strong. To say that it is wrong for to people to love each other, and so much as to keep them away from each other physically or mentally due to gender or age, is discrimination to the highest degree as far as I'm concerned. If two people are truly in love, others should learn to accept it, not criticize, simply because you do not understand it.

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  • DragonHeart
    December 19, 2009

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    Beautiful poem =]
    and yeh being in that situation myself i guess both of them are true for me. people just need to get over themselves if they can't support you then to hell with them lol. just be yourself cos life's too short to be worried about what society thinks...tbh they're the ones wasting their lives worried about stuff that they could never understand!
    good write though really enjoyable


  • Chipp
    June 5, 2008

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    For Society to tear love apart like that is horrible, and yet, unfortanatly happens every day.
    The love and passion in this poem is to real to not be true. Yes?
    You have a true talent for poetry.
    Not only do you give the reader the sense of the abuse upon your love thrust on by society, but a glimmer of hope in the end, that one day you will be with your true love.
    Seth


  • Cerbie20
    June 4, 2008

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    this was good! the rhyming was awesome, and was not forced, it went with the flow. i hate forced rhyming... anyway, i have a few favorite verses:

    I want to dance to our melody.
    I want to dance the dance of our love.
    But luck would have it that society,
    Tore you right out of my arms.

    the metaphor in here was amazing! comparing love to dancing. i wrote a poem like that, its called dancing love. if you want, you should check it out sometime. but its true, society thinks that they have to play a big role in peoples love lives, when really they should be left out.

    When I can say 'I love you',
    And have you say it back.
    When we can freely dance to our love,
    And only be judged from above.

    i along with a lot of people, wish that we could dance freely with our love and be judged not by our people, but instead by our maker. good job with this poem, i loved it!


  • theflamepoetess
    May 28, 2008

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    i like this it flows nice, and the rhyme is good, i liked the over all meaning and the struggles that are faced within ones self. good luck in the contest


  • Blooming Poet
    May 27, 2008

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    people will say things like that to you, especially at your very young age. Do not listen to them, I fell in love at 15 and am still 2 years later with them.


  • storiesuntold
    May 14, 2008
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    Good write indeed

    Love their are many kinds of love and we learn them all through time .


  • violetrose
    May 13, 2008

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    This is a great piece! The disdain for society's hypocrisy is obvious but not overbearing, and the poem has a great message behind it. It definitely makes me think about any judgments I might have made in the past, and how I would feel if someone were to criticize my feelings for someone else. Thanks for entering the contest, and great job!


  • blutearsofpain
    January 17, 2008

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    amazing

    reminds me a lot of my ex and i we were pulled apart against our own will. for us it was our parents they said we were bad for each other, we let them ruin it and had been trying to get it back for 4 yrs now, but secretly, it sucks being judged by who you love and we so shouldn't have listened nothing should ever get in the way of true love so fight for it while you can before its too late
    i loved it great job good luck


  • SchizoChic
    January 16, 2008

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    Every eloquently written. Bravo. I'm so sorry you can't be with the one you love. I hope things all work out and you can get things together soon. I know it's hard not being able to hold one another but be strong. Your time will come.


  • Tam
    November 14, 2007

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    Beautiful poem!

    and your author notes are even more lovely!
    society can be so very cruel...judging...and biased.
    it is a sad reflection on the world we live in today and your write nailed that point perfectly!
    very well done!

    this is a fantastic line:
    I want to dance to our melody.

    your heart is so insightful and loving...
    your beautiful words and example can change the world! and I shall love to watch your journey!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • xxlisajazminexx
    October 17, 2007

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    No love is ever wrong.... ever

    this was beautifully done and with such truth thoughout each line to the next.....
    love is never wrong weither its a man or a woman we love thats our choice ...
    fantastic!
    into my final list you go!!!!!
    great job!!!!



    Thank you so much for entering this creative work of art into my Contest!!!!!!!

    much love and respects!!!
    XxLisaJazminexX
    _____________________________________________________________________


  • Candy6
    October 16, 2007
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    Great write. I like the way this poem looks.

  • Purple-Pen
    October 14, 2007

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    This poem is simply amazing, I love how your telling two stories in one, the utter love for eachother, and the way society is, and blending them together so well. Your authors notes themselfs are a poem to be commented on. Utterly amazing write!!


  • Doomsayer
    October 14, 2007

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    Sweet. I really like that you wrote about a topic like this. I wish life was different and people could love whoever they wanted to, but I also know it's not going to change anytime soon. Maybe this poem will help change some peoples minds.

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