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A Fall's Eve

An odd orange slice suddenly appears.
However, all don't really know why
a fall's eve should finally show
a low slung object in the sky.

The hunter's moon forever knows why.
Again, it's the season to maim and kill.
Frost will soon cover complacent old bones.
No one sees them rotting and still.
Rest easy and welcome the old friend.

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Option One for Contest for Everyone - Halloween
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  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    November 3, 2007
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    Thanks for your entry

    Welcome to allpoetry. Nice to have a new member enter my contest, I am one of the greeters on here so let me know if you need any help. The poem is nice the Hunters or Harvest Moon is one that is always a mystery to me. I never understand why the color changes. Thanks for entering.

    Happy Halloween
    Tammy


  • raspberry Greeters member
    October 31, 2007

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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    A beautiful tribute to the Orange ball on the sky Fabulous entry.. I wonder if I missed seeing them this year.. thanks for the entry.


  • cafegroundzero gold member
    October 31, 2007

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    This is an honest plain look at the eighth month


    or tenth month, depending on your calendar.

    Welcome to AP. I am a volunteer greeter. In this capacity, my role is to help usher you in to the experiences of this site, to answer any questions you may have, & to help you resolve any problems which may come up. Now for this contest, I will try my best to give you constructive criticism.

    I'm still musing at the lines 2, 3 and 4 in the first stanza. Interesting observation. Does no one know? Indeed?


  • Haunted Doll
    October 31, 2007
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    eerie way of thinking. quite different, almost a melancholy morbid. nice job.


  • TheAshtrayGirl
    October 23, 2007

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    :)

    Brilliant
    I love the way you use a different aspect of halloween and the rhyme is done perfectly.
    Good luck in my contest
    From Jaz <3


  • CookieZeal Greeters member
    October 21, 2007
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    Ahhhhhhhh.......a chilling effect to the criteria as I agree with my fellow greeters!

    A little tweaking and it could shine!



    Welcome to the site, and thank you for some wonderful descriptives and entering
    this wonderful contest!
    Warmly, CookieZeal


  • Despairkitty
    October 14, 2007

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    WELCOME TO ALLPOETRY!

    This was just eerie and I really enjoyed it. Well done. Welcome to the site and feel free to ask any of the greeters any questions you may have. I wish you luck in the contest.
    Despair


  • cutiepie gold member
    October 14, 2007
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    I rather liked this errie halloween poem. The first stanza did seem a little seperate from stanza 2, perhaps if you "left align" and take out the gap it would flow a little better. Hope you don't mind, it is just a suggestion The image of the Hunter's Moon and old bones lay the mood. Bravo


  • natchstucco
    October 14, 2007

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    I like this poem, The 2 stanzas seem separated in style but subject is clear. I have these issues too. Both are written well, just not connected. keep the pen handy poet.

    • carole21
      November 2, 2007
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      thanks

      that is why the "why" is in the second stanza . . I do appreciate your taking the time to comment, however . .

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