Standing at the threshold
of Death’s ultimate door,
my last gasp escapes me…
As I’ve never experienced before.
Into the Heavenly realm
I ascend in wonderment,
now housed in an incorruptible body
and thankful that from sin I did repent.
Standing in God’s throne room
freed of all Earthly flesh,
my spiritual essence is energized
and feeling fully refreshed.
Now gathered unto my Savior,
unencumbered reality is more than it seems;
for to be in His Presence
is my accomplished dream.
Having been given my kingly reward,
in these times of everlasting days,
willfully I set my crown at His feet.
For upon my head, nothing gold can stay.
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Author notes
"a rose of any color and bright blue daisies"
nothing gold can stay...
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A contest entry
- nothing gold can stay... by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
400 points, ended October 25, 2007, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Second chance at gold. by BurmaShave.
525 points, ended November 5, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - anything goes by Lola Green.
370 points, ended January 11, 2008, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Love God! by XxForeverFaithfulxX.
550 points, ended July 23, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - God? The Devil? Yourself? A butterfly? by l33t-n1nj4.
600 points, ended August 23, 2008, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Go For The Gold/Rhymers by piccola.
500 points, ended August 31, 2008, 37 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Here's Your Chance to Get that Trophy You Deserved! by TabbyCat.
1200 points, ended October 29, 2008, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Show Me Your Best by JustFallingApart.
400 points, ended January 20, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like the flow of this poem. Thanks for adding it into the group.
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Beautiful piece! Thank you for sharing this truth with me today, I needed to hear it. ;-) Great job reminding us all of God's awesomeness. Blessings!
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This is such a wonderfully written piece!
Congratulations on your three trophies and
I wish you many more in this contest!
Good luck and thanks for sharing it here!
Jeremy0826 -
nice write, thank you for entering
best of luck
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Two honorable mentions and a bronze! Well done, poet! This poem surely deserves them. I like the part about putting your crown at the lord's feet, like all these material things don't matter in the spiritual world.. nothing gold can stay for long, nor should it, because there are always more important things in the spiritual realm than money and physical objects. I wish more people realized this in this society, but at least I am not alone in my standpoint since there are poets out there willing to write from this viewpoint. Congrats
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I really like this one...the prompt was woven effortlessly and naturally into the theme. Very well done.
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Joe..your humble write here is a joy to read for it is the attitude of the true believer...surrendering all to Him..your crown, and the reward is being with Him...Beautiful rhyme and flow...Your love for our Saviour shines all the way through!
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Nicely done,
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This is a wonderfully written poem
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Great poem..with a sparkling message..but unfortunately you didn't follow the rules and place the prompt in your author's notes.
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You are very talented and have such passion. Your words are filled with such love an trust for him. The faith you have is clear. I very much enjoyed reading this GOOD JOB
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wonderful
I really liked this..."willfully I set my crown at His feet. For upon my head, nothing gold can stay." I loved this part! Keep up the good work! Thanks for entering and good luck!
In Christ,
~Kayla~
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Wow, this rocks...thanks for sharing it with me lol and congrats on the Emerald lol
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Good
Joe,
Nicely done. Your talent continues to grow.
Use it for God's greater glory.
Fred (Drybones)
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awh this is very truely amazing. i like this deeply. i happen to believe very strongly in god even though i make many many mistake-but i always try(at least try) to fix them. good structure and style to this poem, it ties in and together very well. like i said...amazing!! keep writing and you will have a very bright future ahead. and also if this poem has its truths you will most definetely go to heaven. enjoy everything, i certainly enjoyed this poem.
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oh! great!
oh! great!
the envying crown is placed at HIS feet
heading for a perfect unison with the supreme being.
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Wow....
I love how you've portrayed dying, and heaven itself. Your words are very powerful, and the piece itself is very well written as well. Great write, keep up the good work!
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Nice piece; the imagery was really well done. You gave just enough details to give the reader a basic idea of the scene, but allowed them to create their own image of the highly individual objects/places in the poem.
Bravo!
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Nothing against the poem but "Nothing Gold Can Stay" is the title of a famous Robert Frost poem. Consider finding something original to fit the poem so it's more your own (rather then living in Robert Frost's shadow).
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Regarding the title...
One might argue that everyone "is living under the shadow of Robert Frost". Besides, the subject or my poem is completely different from his. Thanks for the suggestion; I'll take it under advisement.
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beautifully written. your words flow freely like angel from above. thanks for the read and keep on writing.
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great poem
great poem i really like it. it has a great meaning. and i love the way you put your words. this poem has a felling that came over me when i read it and i liked the way that felling made me feel. thank you for such a beautiful piece. i hope to read more of your beautiful work if you don't mind. once again thank you for letting us read this poem. -
Another good one
I really liked this poem as well. It paints a loyal, true picture of life after death for those who are faithful. Although I'm curious... did you realize the title of your poem is also the title of a famous Robert Frost poem? -
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About the title...
When I wrote this piece, I was unaware of Robert Frost's poem of the same name.
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well good job
well done. i liked it.... keep out of sin and you shall be rewardet. good point.
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Not the greatest of poetry, but better than a lot of the stuff I've seen on this site. It seems to be something very personal for you. The humility and submission is admirable. Good job.
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Beautiful
Superbly written. I really loved it, Great job -
This is very good.
I can tell you put a lot of effort into this. It shows. You done well.
Thanks for sharing with us all!
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I don't know why but for some odd reason, the third Lord of the Ring movie installment flashed through my head as i read:
Having been given my kingly reward,
in these times of everlasting days,
willfully I set my crown at His feet.
For upon my head, nothing gold can stay.
I don't know... Aragorn just keeps popping up. Maybe that's a sign? A good sign? Because Aragorn's my favourite character and he's loyal, royal and cute ;P
Nice piece
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beautiful journey you have created. just beautiful God bless
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wow
wow what a great poem this is i really liked reading it. i can see you put a lot of effort in this poem i love this poem. the way you put your words together was ju8st awesome. i enjoyed reading this and i am looking forward to reading more of your work. once again thank you.
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This is such a wonderful poem. I really enjoyed the imagery here and it was such a pleasure to read. It is so uplifting. Well done.
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my last gasp escapes me…
As I’ve never experienced before.
This for me was the only weak link having one to many sylabuls.
Otherwise it is flawless expression of love of God. -
Hallelujah! Thank the Lord!
HEHE! JK! This is a truly beautiful piece! The last line is AWESOME! I love the tone of relief in the first few stanzas. Hopefully we'll all be able to feel that way! Great Job! God bless you!
Luv ya oodles!
Courtney -
The rhyming did seem like you were trying to make it rhyme. BUT overall this is a very beautiful poem. I like the concept but I too have to disagree just a little. I do believe in heaven but repenting isnt the only thing that you have to do to get there. Anyways loved the poem.
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well done
I want to say that this poem is well written. A wonderful read though I'm sure our beliefs of heavenly rewards deflect a bit.
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I'm not fond of the write and I'm going to say that from a poetry standpoint. I'm also not in agreement with your religious views. I'm not going to debate it or anything because I believe in letting people believe in what they want to. Obviously no one can be sure of what awaits us (if anything) beyond this earthly realm.
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am very greatful for the reminder that we must repent from our ways daily just to be able to stand in God's Throne Room. A great poem indeed.
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good poem..
great write perhaps better than mine.. i wish i could write like that.. one thing it has slight forced rhyme..
comment my poems if you will thanks
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This is another amazing poem from you... I really enjoy reading your work... I think the honorable mention was well deserved indeed, and if that was a prompt you did exceedingly well... wonderful poem
Keep writing
Polly -
very welwritten. tanx for your entry
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You've done a good job maintaining your rhyme. Thank you for entering my contest, and good luck. Matt
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excellent poem good luck in the contest second chance at gold congrats on the hm
Standing in God’s throne room
freed of all Earthly flesh,
my spiritual essence is energized
and feeling fully refreshed.
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I guess I would have a hard time to explain the me that existed a few decades ago how it is to live in the radiance of The Light. We can be conditioned to be born and to die and into experiencing everything that takes place between those to instants. To be free of all these lies of illusion is a feeling infinitely beyond the power of words to express. I commend you for trying to explain any way. These things that move our entire being in most wonderful ways just seem to beg us to share them in the very best way we are capable of. Thank you for creating and sharing this heartfelt poem. Take care,
Chris
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Having been given my kingly reward,
in these times of everlasting days,
willfully I set my crown at His feet.
For upon my head, nothing gold can stay.
This is wonderfully done my friend..I love this piece and thanks for the deep work in this contest...
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Oh, first of all......... I just LOVE the title. You bring the reader in with this true statement that embraces the detail of the whole poem!
for to be in His Presence
is my accomplished dream<---- this reveals what we all want!
I like the way you line up all that is needed to
be within God's favor~! Nice descriptives overall!
*Suggestions*
There are places where the form could stress more
emphasis on its theme. Should you want a more detailed and constructive critique, please let me know!
(Read my author's page regarding Levels 1 and 2 )
Bless you for standing UP for someone who is so far
above us!
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This was great! It brought the reality of repentence to light, and also shows how we will give our treasures in heaven to Jesus. Excellent work!
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a great write speaking much truth.
"For upon my head, nothing gold can stay."
thank you foe sharing this. keep writing! God bless you always
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Wow. That sent chills down my spine. So beautiful, so true. You did an excellent job with this. Lots and lots of luck in the contest.
Write on.
~*~SP~*~
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