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Vow

Destroyed by fate, what other option
Is there?  The poor fool, who once gazed upon the stars
Imagining a lover's eyes among them blessing him,
Now must irrevocably conclude the cruel truth.

So see him there, upon the precipice,
A place that once was frightening
But now invites so seductively.  Pathetic wretch,
Who thought to change destiny, realizes at last
That certain things can be only so.

He renounces the fairer gender, thus,
And vows to never again place trust in them.
The despair, the devastation
Have grown far too large, and far too strong
For him to overcome one more time.
And tender moments shall never be his.

Tender moments shall never be his,
But, underneath the crusting bitterness,
A grudging admiration for the fortunate,
And well wishes, for what else would they take from him?

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No comment, it's just what it is.  Enjoy.

Thanks,

- El Gio
Written October 8th, 2003

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  • Nam
    October 30, 2003
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    I did not care too much for the repetition of the same line twice at the end, I feel it may be needed, but, I do feel it is unnecessary.

    Other than that, I found this piece to hold much angst, but, also a bit of hope and light, not much, but a bit.



  • October 8, 2003
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    In the end I seek only
    truth,wisdom and power
    I shall no more seek desire
    fore promises I shall never receive~
    I venture no more for eternally~
    Fore like grains of sand
    Which so quickly
    From the grasp of man
    This love no more shall spill~
    Wow~
    This was wonderful~
    Though I found it sad~
    It's a wonderful write~
    ~Smiles~Emma