You scream as you awake,
what a laugh! Rest in peace?
Buried deep below the earth,
your not even flipping deceased!
Take deep breaths, try and think.
Oh my god, your stomach sinks!
How could they do this?
Leave you here all alone?
Trapped, scared and suffering,
the worst death ever known.
The lovely lining that they chose,
raked and ripped, till nails bleed.
Why the hell did no~one listen?
Why they hell, did they not heed?
Your ultimate fear has come true,
puffing, panting, needing air.
Tears of frozen fear escape,
crying won't help this deep despair.
Scream with pain, eyes full of fear,
knowing death is so very near.
Intake one last gulp of air,
the tension makes you shake.
Voice hoarse and eyes wide,
you scream as you awake....
Author notes
Option #1 Got to be the worst dream I ever had....
A contest entry
- Tell Me Your Phobia!!!! by ShadowEyes.
450 points, ended November 1, 2007, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Realistic Dreams by Jocilynn Destroyed.
475 points, ended February 2, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Holy Crap....
THAT WOULD SUCK! Very good write, I agree that the last stanza made the poem....twas very well written. Very vivid, very graphic, wel done. Good job and good luck.
Much love and Respect,
Joci -
Intake one last gulp of air,
the tension makes you shake.
Voice hoarse and eyes wide,
you scream as you awake....
this was an awesome close
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This is pretty good. Good luck with writing free verse... it's actually really easy... I used to do this all the time... but then it got even harder and harder to find rhymes that didn't all sound alike, so I just let everything flow out of me all at once... and it was real easy... good work, thanks for your entry! good luck in the contest!!! keep it up!
Shadow -
this is scary! what a fear to have! best wishes in the contest! keep up the fabulous writing!
~horsecowgirl~ -
It's 4 am and I'm alone
what possessed me to read you
lol spooky! but very good
~Pastel
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Whoa
that was scary!
i cold really pictre myselfin that coffin!
that is one of my biggest fears!
Great job!
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This is really beyond creepy. I felt chills running down my arms from this. My favorite thing about this poem is how great you did the rhyming which for me made all the more scary.
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*shudders* wow i like it
i feel like im in there
great job an good luck
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I would never want to be buried alive, that would be the most horrible way to go. Just the thought alone is chilling to me, excellent write, could feel the suffocating of this soul, loved this, best to you in the contest~blessings always~
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