I fell hard
I fell fast
I fell deep
but even when you were gone, I was still fallen
and I couldn’t get up
Author notes
A prewritten entry most fitting option 1
A contest entry
- Back Stabbing friends! by black hearted rebel.
450 points, ended August 26, 2008, 7 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Good job and thanks for entering.
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you say so much with so little i love how your writting does that with just a few lines you get such emotion and imagery acrost
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hmmm....very interesting style
i like it
the ending was good
it was short and sweet
to the point
but still left room to think
very interesting
whats the meaning behind it??
love ya,
molly -
"Help, I've fallen and I can't get up." I always laugh at that commercial. But, in all seriousness, this was cool. Short and to the point. It's sad how when people fall, people leave without helping them back up...metaphorically of course. It'd be kinda sad if they didn't help them up when they physically fall, lol. Good write. Keep it up.
*snap*
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