The tears,
They fall.
Like the pouring rain.
Hot trails...
Cascading down my cheeks.
A love once new.
But now is burnt.
You held my heart...
So gently in your hands.
So lovingly...
So carefree...
And now it lay upon the ground...
Shattered..
Obliterated...
My tears are all I have left of you...
Besides your scent that lingers on the air.
My soul screams out...
Tearing at my chest..
My hands are bloody
From the method of pain release.
I bleed for you.
And for what we've lost...
Your life is lost...
To the darkness of this night.
And mine falls short...
Of anything worth living...
Falling to my knees...
The wind washing away my sobs..
My hands rest upon your grave...
So fresh..
So new..
Marking the end of another beautiful life.
As the blood runs smooth...
Down my arms...
Through my fingers..
I cry...
Such horrid gut wrenching sobs...
Rake at my body.
My life is slipping away...
But no loss is felt...
But the loss of you...
I am numb from the inside out...
And I can feel the pain ebbing away...
I cry out your name...
As my heart beats it's final beat...
Falling atop your grave...
As my battered soul rejoins yours...
My pain is no more...
And my heart is yours once more.
Author notes
this one was ....difficult to write...i hope you like it babe...it took alot outta me...
A contest entry
- Seduce Me, Make Me Cry, Make Me Love... by near1202apocalypse.
450 points, ended October 21, 2007, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
This one hurt to write.....
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I can understand why this one took so much out of you to write.
But the loss of you...
I am numb from the inside out...
And I can feel the pain ebbing away...
I cry out your name...
As my heart beats it's final beat...
Falling atop your grave...
As my battered soul rejoins yours...
My pain is no more...
And my heart is yours once more.
I was thinking about how you mentioned that the love of your life is in the Air Force Special Forces. I think this speaks very well to those who are suffering day and night, wondering if their loved ones will come home safe and sound from the war in Iraq. I'm a Navy veteran from Desert Storm, and I served as a medic in the Army National Guard, although I didn't go to Iraq with the National Guard. I got out the year before 9-11.
My heart and prayers go out to all those fighting every day to defend us, and to all of those who love them.
Knight70
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Don
You hit the emotions on this one on the head!!! I miss him...and since he's special forces I know what will ensue considering his job choice. But it's something i'll have to live with. And that alone is petrifying...but you see me so well. Better than most of those close to me. And I thank you for that. **hugs** He, and everyone in the military has my unconditioned support...and love. Thank you Don...you always bring out the best in me!!!
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This is beautifully written. Is this a true happening, someone departing this world? Or is it a depiction of love break? Many poems seem to project a break up and the heart wrenchingness of it, all to me seeming to perfect- and artfully depict how I killed my boyfriend (how he felt) for the days we broke up. luckily for him and I I realised my love for him was not at all lost, and i am sorry if i have misinterpreted your poem. Either way, this beautiful piece is well worth a medal. Kudos and deepest regards for the source of emotion for this poem.
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Satanic-Faery
You read it's meaning rather well...it's about a loved one dying...nearly a romeo and juilet scenario...**grins** This one was a first for me of it's type...but it was an interesting write and more will likely follow soon. Thanks for your comments!!! I'll defeintly have to take some time and read your writes!!!
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Very powerful emotions in this piece. I think this is my favorite write by you that I've read so far. As I read it an image came to my mind of a person crying with their arms around a gravestone, mourning a deceased loved one.
Loss is such a tragedy to go through in life and I think it's something that tests the feeling of love to find out if the feeling is true. Best of luck in the contest.
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ARZAB
**blushes deeply** thank you so very much...it was an interesting write for sure.
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It somewhat reminded me of what E. A. Poe would write about. Wonderfully written, and it really is powerful with a lot of emotions and i could almost feel it as i was reading it. Great job, and thank you so much for commenting on my poems...i havn't gotten a comment in months (except by just one person i personally know). Thank you once again, and now ill comment your poetry.
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Beyond the unknown
This one was a weird, suddenly the pen takes over kind of poem. I don't know where it came from or why it was written...but it's what came out...**laughs** and I adore E. A. poe!!! And your very welcome for the comments...thats what this site is for..**winks**
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made me cry!
This is such a sad poem about love... absolutely beautiful!!!
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near1202apocalypse
Thanks it wasn't easy to write for some reason...dont' know waht came over me with this one
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