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regrets regrets

I never thought so much pain
Could've brought so much rain
If I knew then what I know now
I wouldn't be crying for change

These tears of regret
Are definitely not the best
My cheeks are constantly wet
Because of the pain behind my chest

Every tear that leaves my cheek
Adds to a puddle around my feet
I hope it doesn't get too deep
And I drown in my own weep

I hope and pray one day
These regretful tears I cry
Will soften up the grounds
For a better you and me

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  • ZachP
    October 15, 2007
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    This poem is full of emotion, but it reads like you're trying too hard to make your couplets rhyme... I'd recommend that you just let your words flow, instead of forcing them into rhyme.

    Other than that, this is excellent. You've provided some interesting and new images.

    Be blessed, my friend, who ISN'T a loser face
    Zach~

  • mutilatedemotions
    October 14, 2007
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    I enjoyed this poem. I like the way that you worded it and the emotion that you put into it.