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flowers and love

with a beating heart
waiting...


she looks into his eyes
with love
and admiration

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my first try at septolet. I liked this type. Hope it is ok!

A contest entry

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  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 22, 2007

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    oh the power of love....*sigh* this was a captivating piece. few words that packed a punch.
    best wishes to you
    Tory


  • delightfulmess silver member
    October 17, 2007

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    This is beautiful... Only one small thing a septolet
    has 7 lines but otherwise this was stunning.....
    Thank you for entering and trying this great form


    delila


  • checkmate
    October 14, 2007

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    This is a beautiful piece. Probably quite hard to write too (lol I dont know how to realy count syllabusses- I almost always get them wrong and I have never even heard of this form)

    But personally, I think you could have added more emotion into this than purely description. I think this was missing something- just a feeling.

    Great piece though and best of luck


  • Beauty Of Silence
    October 14, 2007

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    AHHhhhh... a love poem! NICE! i liked this alot... is this somthing like the one u did earlier... you have to count the syllabols right! i like that type as well! it just gives me the challenge!

    OH! and i had the picture of this in my mind! two lovers just falling in love! aww... its just so sweet! But it's ok... we'll wait for ours to happen!

    Best of luck in the contest! takkire!