Dream-weaver,
Spinning gold
From autumn-scented sunshine smiles
Given freely by those
To whom you freely give
Your masterpieces
(Sugar-spun tales
And lazy daydreams),
I wonder why you don’t
Weave yourself
Right on down
To the real world,
To generate some hope
For the saltwater planes of reality
The rest of us live on
Until you pluck us up
And weave us a dream of our own.
You’ve made me
A willing marionette
For your fuzzy-headed puppet show showcases
That draw dreamers
From ‘round the reality,
But I won’t hold
With going over, under, and away
To lie blissfully stagnant.
No, someday, majestic wizard,
You’re gonna pull my strings
And lift me past the precipice
Into your dream world,
And I’m gonna wake you up.
I’ll fling us from the tower
Only to see
If we’re caught by angel arms.
(And if the world can’t hold
Another dream-weaver,
We’ll be free-falling
And it’ll be real,
And real beautiful
Until we hit the ground.)
Author notes
This is a poem inspired by a friend and their words. The grammatical errors ("gonna", "real beautiful", etc.) are intentional.
A contest entry
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i like this poem. and i like the grammatical errors, because that is just how people talk. thats why i dont really care how many errors are in a poem, because i like it that way... thats how people really are, you know what i mean? and your friend is a smart person...
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First off, let me say that I enjoyed reading this entry. I know you said the grammatical errors are intentional but where it says "gonna to pull my strings" is the "to" intentional? While I liked the other "grammatical errors" because they added to the personality of the poem, that little to broke the flow. Otherwise, brilliant piece.
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Thank you! No, the "to" wasn't intentional - I hadn't noticed it. Thanks for pointing it out
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Very nice job of writing for the chosen prompt. An excellently worded and flowing piece. Best of luck...Scott
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nice
I can appreciate the grammer,I would never ask you to change this,as it is a part of you what you intended is how it should stay. I really like it,the words are very well placed. Nice metaphor. Good luck in my contest! Plz do not respond to my comment until contest is over thnx! -
I love this! It's amazing! I love the song dream weaver and your poem title captivated my interest as much as your poem did! Good Luck! ^_^
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