My life soars blindly, far from all others
Deep, yet overwhelming
That some times it smothers
The life of those that look up to me
Yet,
So far and so high
That some may not see
The image that shines and sparkles,
That resembles a star
That can hardly be seen, so close, yet so far
I waiver as I travel the skies of oblivion
Keeping pace with the others
Yet sustaining my momentum
It’s the weight I carry
The sky I’ll marry
To be one with thee,
It’s the world that should be weary
Weary of the fire, I spit with no callous
No bragging or boasting
On my testicles or phallus
Share my desire as if you shared my needs
The desire you feed, it’s why you shared my seed
Impregnating the intimacy
That reveals my greed
Yet, I move on
No choice to prolong
The rights that were wronged
Left in agony as the weak reveals the strong
So I fly away
Away
Fly away from that need
No more conscience thoughts I feel
With no room
to proceed
Author notes
K) Above the clouds. This was a an open Mike spoken word
piece that came together after I came off a flight from Jersey. A little weird, I know.
In a list
A contest entry
- CONTEST FOR GIRLS TALK BOYS TALK GROUP by Jeremy0826.
1100 points, ended October 30, 2007, 12 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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this piece speaks of independence and uniqueness, individualism...and creative freedom....i enjoyed it so much - loved the pace
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Different
This is different from anything that I have seen you write, but you have so many different ways that you can write, I am not surprised, excellent write, thank you for sharing and keep them coming.
raingoddess
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Yes it was. The pic is so cool u have,
Yup - I try anything that comes to me. This said,"hey write this down for on stage". I hate to argue with myself 
Thanks sweetie
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This was a great concept of the picture. Very soft and hopeful and uplifting. Love that the imagery was vivid. You have a way with words. Hope you do well in this. Crossing my fingers!!!!
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Well thank U. Spoken word is different so you really have to change from written to speaking. This was cool and Thanks for the lovely encouragement. BTW - I wrote then got the picture. Sort of went backwards on this one ~ cheers
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wonderful rhythm! this piece flows flawlessly and has some very vivid imagery! some of the wording is quite clever and biting!
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Mikey this was a pleasure to read! I love to go and participate in open mic nights here as well. They're a lot of fun and a great challenge to see what you can come up with. Great imagery and emotions in this. Thanks a lot for entering this poem into my contest. I appreciate it and wish you the best of luck with it here. Keep up the wonderful work here my friend!
Jeremy0826 -
really good work here. This was amzing at the information you express your emotions well.
My life soars blindly, far from all others
Deep, yet overwhelming
That some times it smothers
The life of those that look up to me
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Without Disguising Your Heart
Your spoken word is astonishing, I see you as a man married to his travels, that journeys far and wide. There's a certain amount of pleasure in these words.
favorite lines are:
"Share my desire as if you shared my needs
The desire you feed, it’s why you shared my seed
Impregnating the intimacy
That reveals my greed"
This a deep request for a mate to remember what you mean to her. Or for the world/co-workers to stop and see just how dedicated you are to the point of success.
This however is a excellent piece for spoken word. I read it out loud and then it really impressed me....
Write ON!..............................Mom
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Oh wow... good luck in the contest.... this was just great! I especially love the picture! Reminds me of a childhood favorite... Mary Poppins! But I guess it would be Gary Poppins, eh? ... A rather... riskay Poppins! This was a pretty good piece.
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Thanks - it was weird. Thats all I could think of on the plane and once i wrote it down I had to use it at a spoken word place. It sounded right for that reason.
Oyeah - the Michael Poppins thing came to me too LOL!!! I looked for a picture like this. It worked. Thanks!! Mykeee
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