Imagine a nightmare, a nightmare so real
That you feel what you touch and touch what you feel
Fear is something where anything goes
Its in everyone just like the blood that flows
Pulsing throughout; the shadows of your mind
Reach into darkness and fear is what you'll find
Fearless is a lie ,don't even attempt
It spreads like a disease and no one is exempt
Caused by others or self inflicted pain
There are as many fears as raindrops in the rain
It is something you cannot deny
And is the darkside of your mind's eye
So listen as I say its all your haunted dreams
Fear...true fear is exactly what it seems
A contest entry
- SHOW ME FEAR by Sinnastarr.
450 points, ended October 14, 2007, 39 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me Everything you've Got by CrystalJet.
600 points, ended March 14, 2008, 318 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think and what you think I could improve.
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Amazing
I love the thought of fear, and I enjoy it thoroughly in poetry! you had great flow throughout and well, it was quite enjoyable. great job
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Profound!
This poem is deep but understandably true. Great flow, rhythm and composition!! -
Lovely rhyming and it flows really well when you read it aloud, the message is spooky as its so true. You've put across your thoughts across very vividly. Well wrote.
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Phenomenal
I absolutely love this poem, it's true to life and just over all extraordinary!!!! I absolutely love it!!(once again!!)
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This was a good write. I enjoyed the piece very much. You painted a vivid picture here. I liked the lines
"Pulsing throughout; the shadows of your mind
Reach into darkness and fear is what you'll find"
Well done.
Thank you so much for entering my contest and I wish you the best of luck.
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