I realized quite suddenly that this
is not all I want to do.
I don’t know how I fell into it.
This dance.
Your dance.
I don’t want to…..I don’t have to.
Before I am part of you
I am all of me.
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When I started, I couldn’t dance.
I let you lead me around the floor.
That time has passed.
Thank you for teaching me
but the time has come for me to do
my own interpretation of the Life Dance.
*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
I don’t know when I grew up;
when I stopped needing you to lead.
But I did.
You can stay if you want to.
I will still dance with you.
But I will take the lead from time to time.
I wont always follow you.
*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
Do you want to dance?
Author notes
As you can tell, the speaker is a little confused. This is because the concept of having some control - some choice – in her life, is new to her.
A contest entry
- prewrites by Melissa Gayle.
400 points, ended October 13, 2007, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
It's all good.
Comments
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The word 'dance' is repeated in this piece quite a bit, I think it would help to cary the word usage.
Your emotion is continued throughout nicely. -
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suggestion?
I purposely used the word “dance” seven times.
The poem is about the Dance that is Life.
I will consider changing it if you can suggest
words that will convey the same message.
(bop – boogie – hop – skip – jazz – tap –
ballet and salsa are the options my word
possessor offers.) Any assistance will be welcomed.
Linda
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