Fates twisted souls before,
but not like mine.
You can see it, can't you?
Tell me, could I be your tragedy?
(This girl breeds hate in her veins)
I am cold, but I won't hurt you,
my demons are not misplaced.
Though I cannot control these devastations,
they are mine, and I am consumed by them.
A contest entry
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460 points, ended March 2, 2008, 75 entries
Honorable mention
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Gold trophy winner
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Silver trophy winner
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Ohh, I like it
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thank you for entering! I must say, I really liked this poem. you did an amamzing job here, keep it up, and good luck
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this is good
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wow you ar eon complete zest fire with this i think you did a very great job good luck to you in the contest this was a complete pleasure reading this
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wow, amazing imagery. thanks for entering
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love it
This girl breeds hate in her veins,-great line.
I love how i can relate to it.
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I can definitely relate
I love short poems, with incredible depth beneath the words. This is a wonderful poem, very heartfelt. Thanks for entering!
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i like this a lot.
it is short, but it has very good imagery and you can see the despair in this person's life.
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touching
amazing this is really good
Wow we all have our inner demons we often do not let others see how far we have fallen into sadness but is all an act this is really good
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DEEPLY TOUCHING!!!!
I know we all have our own demons and we let them rule our lives. We often do not let others see how far down we have fallen but the deep sadness is lying there just beneath our surface.
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great write!! you did a great and wonderful job!!! have a great and blessed day!
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intriguing
to be honest emo's not really my thing, but this is good and it's well written. it comes from the heart and that's what's important
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The grotesque beast with the heart of an angel.
"I do not wish to be what I am, only who I dream to be..."
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I've definitely been at this point before so I know EXACTLY where you are coming from. It's hard to fight those demons too...love it!
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wow i could feel it sounds like me sometimes
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this is good. You admit you have demons but that they won't hurt someone. YOu may have demons but you should never have to deal with them alone.
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Very powerful, this reminds of the things that i used to write. Everyone has their demons, and sometimes poetry can seriously help.
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HEART-WRENCHING!!!!
I have my demons and they do from time to time find their way out and make my day miserable. I do somehow find the strength to send them away though where it comes from I do not know. We all have them none of us can say we don't.
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Stunning!! I'm speachless...it's amazing...I love the way you write!!
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