invade their homes leave no one free
close their eyes let them follow me
show them that we know whats best
fill thier veins get them obsessed
give them beings of intense attraction
this is our great plan of action
killing them all one by one
drowning their voices
massacre of their body and form
obliterating their choices
stealthy as a panther on a moonless night
innocent as an angel with an aura of light
sharp as a dagger is our bite
forceful and charming is our plight
join us
Author notes
AHAHA! i got it! i finnally got it! this is the media!
it's dark light cause people think it's good when it ain't, put the rest of the pieces together yourselveses
A contest entry
- Silvosian Rhymes Group Contest #2 by Silvos..
1050 points, ended October 29, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
well give it to me straight
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Hey baby, not bad. This is a very haunting write, it puts a twist on things. Love it. Hope you're well. Sorry I haven't been commenting, I suck at it I know. Keep writing though, luv ya tons!
Hannah
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you don't suck! you just have a life to attend to! thanks for your comments love ya.
~theharvester
p.s btw i'll be doing fine if i pass my math test but how are you doing?
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Loved it Visara. It was an intresting and creative spin on the title "Dark Light." Very talented you are. Great write and luck in our second group contest!
Silvos.
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thankees silvos.
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To me, it sounds like the army. "join us" sounds like uncle sam. I quite liked this acutally. Although now that I take a second look at it and your notes, it does relate to the media. Actually it could relate to many things. I like it, it lets the imagination wander nice job!
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UNCLE SAAAAM! that is all
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Right. I also meant to say that I know it is about the media. Not to say that I think it is about wary. Just to clear that up.
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It feels like a call to war against people we ought not to be killing.
But that is what you want isn't it? I like the comparison to the panther and the angel.
What a propaganda piece.
I like it.
My only request would be to make the font darker because it is hard to read on the lavender background. Ignore that though if there is a picture that resnet just hasn't- oh. yeah never mind then.
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right that be an deviantart thing you were talking about? glad you liked it comment on my other new ones
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i never even mentioned devart. i haven't the faintest what you are talking about.
i'll get around to reading and commenting, but only in my own sweet time.
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you were talking about something i'd never heard of about my background thats why i was asking.
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The background picture just didn't show up until I was writing the comment. Because resnet is slow.
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ohhhhhhhh.
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Yes this sounds like it could be the media, they do give intense attraction, killing everyone one by one. You actually have this put in a light hearted way, but this is very damaging to our society, and I delighted in reading this, very nice flow, and thought provoking. thank you for sharing~blessings~
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